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(Ielts) Most countries develop their economies to improve living standards



william731 18 / 43  
Feb 17, 2013   #1
Most countries develop their economies to improve living standards. Some people are afraid that it will cause degradation of important social values. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Economic development is always one of the most pivotal aspects that most countries strive to improve for the sake of their people. Yet, some hold a contentious view that it will result in deterioration of social values. Just like everything, developing a better economy has both pros and cons and I personally believe the merits outweigh the drawbacks.

On the plus side, a prosperous society can attract oversea investors and bring offshore funding into local economy. These entrepreneurs may invest money in building factories which in turn creates job vacancies and thus reduces unemployment. Moreover, those people often introduce new technology to the country that may improve the productivity of local businesses. Furthermore, allowing them to compete with local companies has an economic benefit since competition can lead to cheaper goods with high qualities. Therefore, people can be benefited from the lower living costs.

However, people has been becoming ruthless along with the continuing economic expansion. There are more and more opportunists who strive for their own interest regardless of others' well being. For instance, it is very common that some companies do not provide reasonable remunerations for their workers aiming at cost reduction. In addition, people are occupied by their ambitious career developments resulting less time spent with their families. Work-related competition also forces those people to be isolated from their colleagues. It is those factors that have driven people to be selfish.

To conclude, although the drawbacks cannot be avoided, a well-developed economy brings positive outcomes that significantly benefit the people in that economy and improve the overall living qualities. Thus, it is essential for countries to develop better societies economically.

dumi 1 / 6795  
Feb 17, 2013   #2
Economic development is always one of the most pivotal aspects that most countries strive to improve for the sake of their people. Yet, some hold a contentious view that it will result in deterioration of social values. Just like everything, developing a better economy has both pros and cons and I personally believe the merits outweigh the drawbacks

Very impressive :)

On the plus side, a prosperous society can attract overseaforeign investors and bring offshore funding into local economy.

" foreign" is a better key word that goes with the word "investor"

Furthermore, allowing them to compete with local companies has an economic benefit since competition can lead to cheaper goods with highbetter qualityqualities .

Therefore, people can be benefited from the lower living costs.

... This is my suggestion;
This would benefit the citizens at large by providing them with quality goods and services at a reasonable price.

However, people hashave been becoming ruthless along with the continuing economic expansion.

However, it cannot be denied that people keep loosing good moral values along with the continuing economic expansion.

You write extremely well... I think you are ready to take up this task and wish you Good Luck!
OP william731 18 / 43  
Feb 17, 2013   #3
dumi

Thanks for your effort, dumi


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