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Credit cards's advantages

onur 1 / 1  
Jul 17, 2009   #1
In our modern world,a lot of things facilitating our daily lives have been invented.One of these is credit cards.In my opinion,they are indespensable and beneficial tools for us.

Firstly,one of the advantages of credit cards is that we dont have to carry cash to purchase anything.In the first place,Credit cards are electronic devices so all of proceedings about those is fulfiled in an electronic environment.Therefore,carrying a credit card rather than large body of banknotes,we can do everything about money.In addition to this,we can make installment.When credit cards have these useful traits,it is irreasonable to use money

Secondly,aother advantages of credit cards is being useful in emergency.In today's economic conditions,we can have hard days about our economic situations so we need to borrow money from somebody.In this circumstance,we can benefit from our credit cards on the condition that we pay later.For example, a student studying at a university away from his familiy may feel that he needs to buy a book when he has no money and he can purchase the book using credit cards until his family send money.It is a fact that credit card have facilitated our lives.

In conclusion.credit cards have great deal of benefits such as being ractical and being hard-days friends to us and using credit card will increase in the future and maybe we won't use money at all.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jul 17, 2009   #2
Credit cards are not exactly new. Therefore your first two sentences are not quite right.

I notice that you are not spacing after your punctuation marks. This makes your essay very difficult to read, as your sentences all run together. Correct that problem and post again for more feedback.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 17, 2009   #3
"Therefore,carrying a credit card rather than large body of banknotes,we can do everything without paper money."

I don't know who/what you are writing this essay for, but it might be an idea to deal with some of the opposing arguments. So, for instance, some might argue that credit cards encourage people to live beyond their means, and can in some cases lead people to a lifetime of struggling with debt.
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jul 18, 2009   #4
Not to mention that the benefit of not carrying cash is obtained by a debit card, without any of the risk of debt overload that comes with a credit card.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 18, 2009   #5
As long as you don't mind paying a bit extra for every single thing that you purchase.
OP onur 1 / 1  
Jul 18, 2009   #6
i am sorry,i am new in this forum.i am very bad at wrighting. i try to fulfil your advices. thank you for your help about essays
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jul 20, 2009   #7
Feel free to post a revised draft here for more feedback.
john6503 9 / 27  
Jul 21, 2009   #8
You forgot to leave spaces after a full stop and a comma.

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