These days, most of universities have many subjects for male or female only

University and Gender

I agree that the universities open many subjects and will increase more quote for students who enrolling in universities. Also, they do not make limit for male or female who will study in special subjects which are usually the subjects for male only.

These days, most of universities in Indonesia especially, they have many subjects for male or female only. The subjects are such as engineering, information technology (IT), industrial technical, nurse, baby doctor, physical therapy, and others. In my opinion, in Indonesia's government they are giving many scholarships for everyone who takes those special subjects. Those are engineering, information technology and industrial technical, not all students for female especially, more interest with those subjects. It is usually only few men or women who are working in other job field out of their gender range.

The Other fact, the universities only accept student likewise the subjects like as nurse, baby doctor and physical therapist for female only. In the fact, most of female students like with the subjects which are it for male only and conversely. It is because, in modern time like nowadays is it possible if a woman be an engineer or something else which is job only for male range. Other subjects which only for women are not close opportunity for the men students get jobs where it does by male in reality. These days are many nurse, baby doctor, physical therapy which are usually those jobs field are only for women carrier but the men also can join it and they can do better and women.

Overall, the universities should increase more quote for some subjects like in above. So, the students will have more spirit to study.

Yulis, what is the complete prompt for this essay? It will be easier to review the essay if we knew what the specific requirements are. Anyway, I can tell that you have a very strong opinion on the matter so I will be reviewing the essay from that angle.

Let me just say that if not for some grammar weaknesses on your part, you will have built a very strong essay based upon your experience with co-ed education in your country. That said, I will do my best to help you correct the grammar and I hope that I am able to keep the essence of what you want to say as well.


- While it is nice to read your opinion on the matter so early in the essay, you needed to rephrase or restate the prompt first. You know the basic rule of essay writing, always restate the prompt. Without it, your reader will not really know why you are discussing a certain matter in the essay. Your thoughts seem to be getting lost in translation as well so let me try to give you a hand with this.

- I agree that universities should open up their subjects to an equal number of male and female students because the increased number of enrolled students will mean that students will be enrolling in subjects that truly interest them. Removing the limitation on the number of students or gender of the students that can enroll in a certain class will level the professional field for all future workers.


- Yulis, you seem to have misunderstood the prompt at this point. You are not being asked to discuss the limitations on enrollment in certain classes because of gender. The basis for the essay is that the schools allow both genders to enroll in the same classes. It is just that there are more men or women enrolled per class. So the discussion is whether the university should encourage an equal number of students to enroll per class. It has nothing to do with gender limitations pertaining to the classes.It would be best for you to rethink this part and form a new opinion or supporting paragraph for it.


- Again, this is not about gender limitation or discrimination. This is about increasing the rate of enrollment in universities by encouraging an equal number of male and female students to enroll for classes. What benefits can be had from that? Why is it important to encourage an equal number of male and female students per class? Those are the evidences that you should be presenting.


- Why are you introducing a new idea in your conclusion? You know that is against the conclusion writing rules of the essays. Just restate the prompt, repeat your opinion, and summarize the facts.

1. Avoid shopping listing. In formal writing, commonly, it attaches three words or phrases.
eg. engineering, nursing and politics.
2. Rid the lazy language like this.


pediatrician or paediatrician.

I think your essay may out of line answering the prompt. Pay attention in what those suggestion given to you above.