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The diagrams describe the process of the chocolate making, which involves ten fixed steps



nda18 46 / 60  
Nov 21, 2016   #1
The diagrams describe the process of the chocolate making. Overall, it can be seen that there are 10 steps in making the chocolate including the pods growing stages and factory producing stages.

To begin, the cacao trees are grown in South America, Africa and some region of Indonesia. The ripe red pods from cocoa trees are harvested and the white cocoa beans are then removed from them. Next, the removed white cocoa beans are fermented and then laid them out on a large board so that they can be dried under the sun. The dried cocoa beans are put in a large sack then taken to the chocolate factory using railway or lorry. In the factory, the beans are roasted in 350 centigrade oven. After that, the roasted beans are crushed to remove their outer shell. In the final stage, the inner part of roasted beans are pressed and the liquid chocolate are produce.


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NinaJoesuf25 36 / 61  
Nov 21, 2016   #2
Hi nurul,
your writing is great but there are some correction that I think will make it better.

... the process of the chocolate making.the making chocolate stages.

... put in a large sack then taken ,with delievering to the chocolate ...
After thatSubsequently, the roasted beans are crushed ...


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