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[IELTS] different preferences of leisure activities


clarkmc 3 / 17  
Aug 26, 2012   #1
I would really appreciate if you could help me with my essay writing. I always get a bandscore of 6.5 and I need to get a 7 in writing . Thank you ver much.

Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during the leisure time . Discuss both views.

There are many ways to spend leisure time. Some people are more likely to be interested on spending it on their own wherein they could still make their brains work. While others prefer activities that would divert them from stress and pressures that they acquire from their environment. In this essay I will examine the arguments for and against in both views.

Working people are fortunate enough to find time to put themselves in a different environment away from work. The same with children having long breaks from school lectures, homeworks and examinations. In order to spend their leisure time in a productive way, some people would prefer activities that would enriched their intelligence and learning ability. In this manner, they could continuously improve they mind and not be stagnant. Playing crossword puzzle from a newspaper, for example, this increases a person's ability to think and vocabulary by learning new words. However, this kind of activity tends the person to be disinterested in socializing with others.

Holidays and school breaks are considered important in most families. For the main reason that they all want to have a break from their usual daily routine. Some would find it more relaxing to travel abroad and others would prefer to join group leisure events. For instance, in Family Summer Camp, members joined to experience enjoyment through social interactions from different camp activities. Some activities involves mental and physical tasks that is enjoyable to do.

In conclusion, people have different preferences of leisure activities. In some such way, they will improve not only mentally but also physically, emotionally and socially. These aspects are important to an individual's development.

amitt - / 80  
Aug 26, 2012   #2
There are few other examples like sea surfing/tracking/sea side views/get together/watching movies/playing outdoor games/sun set watching etc.
Well, I will also give IELTS exams on 13-oct-12 I too scored 6.5, I require 7.5
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Aug 26, 2012   #3
While others prefer to engage in activities that would divert them from stress and pressures that they acquire from theirof the environment they live in .

Working people are fortunate enoughwould want to find time to put themselves in a different environment away from work.

---------- there may be unfortunate working people too who cannot find such time even if they want to :P

The same with children havingwho love long breaks from school lectures, homeworks and examinations.

some people would prefer activities that would enriched their intelligence and learning ability.

they could continuously improvetheytheir mind and not befeel stagnanted .
OP clarkmc 3 / 17  
Aug 27, 2012   #4
thank you for your help! I plan to at least do one essay each day before my ielts exam again. This forum really helps a lot.

amitt, hope thus time we get the required score. Good luck to us :)
amitt - / 80  
Aug 27, 2012   #5
I think Maria you write very fast please, check your spelling "
amitt, hope thus (this ) time we get the required score. Good luck to us :)" Well, you have any study material please don't be shy to share with me. Also, I will send you few study material vis-a-vis. my email Id is zaqq7866@yahoo.co.in

Thanks a lot for advicing not to use contractions. My drawbacks are using vocabularies in writing as well as speaking.
Best Regards,
AS
amitt - / 80  
Aug 27, 2012   #6
Dumi Please, check my objections too that I have made are they correct??
OP clarkmc 3 / 17  
Aug 27, 2012   #7
you are right amitt i tend to write so quick not minding the spelling and and punctuations. I could share the book that I have been reading. I will send it to you later today. It is called Writing for IELTS by Collins .
amitt - / 80  
Aug 27, 2012   #8
Great, well I will also send you today in the evening, if I will receive some IELTS feedbacks!
Thanks for your encouraging words
Good Luck
amitt - / 80  
Aug 28, 2012   #9
I send you many emails related to IELTS, hope you will also keep your promise!!
Regards,
AS
OP clarkmc 3 / 17  
Aug 28, 2012   #10
sending it again =)
amitt - / 80  
Aug 28, 2012   #11
Thanks for your book,please if you have some thing more do not hesitate to share with me.
Best Regards
AS
Murko 2 / 3  
Aug 28, 2012   #12
Hi Guys,

I am new to this forum. I am preparting for my IELTS exam. I need band 7 or more. Could you guys share some essay that would qualify band 7.

Amit, Maria could you guys share your study material with me as well. My mail id is murko.agom ( G M A I L . C O M )

Thank you,
Murko
Macrusa 5 / 16  
Aug 28, 2012   #13
" In this essay I will examine the arguments for and against in both views."

I think the essay is overall nicely developed but I don't think this is necessary.

"However, this kind of activity tends the person to be disinterested in socializing with others."
Maybe this? However, this activity tend to make people more reserved.
layla88 3 / 16  
Aug 31, 2012   #14
interested onin

clarkmc
oh dears

I am wondering could I join to your group of exchanging study marital. I am going to take my exam on 27th of October, I require 7. I did not participate in any IELTS examination and I am very nervous, once I took TOEFL IBT.

I wish good luck for all of you,and appreciate your helps
my email is: mazaheri.leyla@gmail.com
I will send you Answers to All TOEFL Essay Questions, which is similar to IELTS essay task2 or some sample essays of IELTS task1,in return
OP clarkmc 3 / 17  
Aug 31, 2012   #15
just write as many essays as you can and post it here, lots of practice will make us all improve in essay writing. Then we could share tips and techniques of writing essay for IELTS/TOEFL. We will all learn from each other. =)


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