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IELTS 2: Different views about whether teachers should give their students assignments or not


trangta0807 1 / -  
Feb 14, 2023   #1

SCHOOL CHILDREN NOT BE GIVEN HOMEWORK



Some people believe that school children should not be given homework by their teachers, whereas others argue that homework plays an important role in the education of children. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

My essay:

People have different views about whether teachers should give their students assignments or not. While both of these ideas have positive sides, I believe that homework is essential to educate children.

On the one hand, students could spend more time improving physical health when not being given homework. For example, children should play sports or do volunteering to serve the community instead of staying at home in order to finish schoolwork. In fact, this even reduces pressure for students and helps them to enjoy childhood completely. Furthermore, when children are not forced or reminded of doing homework regularly, they are likely to have a good relationship with their parents and a positive view about school. Finally, not giving homework requires students to concentrate on lessons which are taught in class so as to understand clearly.

On the other hand, it is perhaps even more important for students to revise knowledge by doing assignments. Instead of promoting the idea that students just learn theories, they should take more time to practice. Owing to the time for each lesson at school might not be enough for students to put questions to their teacher, they should do homework to discover unobvious points and research by themself. Moreover, demanding children to finish tasks helps to build their responsibility and self-discipline, while pushing them to study harder and focus on the knowledge they are taught. This is the attitude that I believe schools should foster in children.

In conclusion, I can understand why people might not want to give homework to children, but it seems to me that the assignment is a necessary part of education.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,830 4781  
Feb 15, 2023   #2
I believe that homework is essential to educate children.

Why? Give an overview of the 2 reasons that will support your ideas in the reasoning paragraphs. The writer's opinion is not as clear as it can be because of the missing thesis presentation. That is the 3rd sentence for this paragraph. It will help pull the paragraph discussion together for the benefit of your TA score.

The main problem with the essay is the disregard for the public opinion explanation in relation to your personal opinion. Where the words

Some people

and

others argue

are found in the presentation, the writer is expected to explain the public support for each opinion. Use publicly known information to explain why the public supports each opinion. Then present your own opinion and reasons as the 3rd reasoning paragraph. This is the format to be followed for discussion presentations such as the one you have chosen above.

Notice that you tried to explain your opinion in the concluding paragraph? Well, that is not considered a closing statement. You actually wrote an essay that will fail because it does not provide the correct concluding summary information in the last paragraph. This is an automatic failing score since you did not properly summarize the discussion points in the reverse summary paragraph.

If this were any other common essay type and not an IELTS Task 2 essay that comes with specific writing requirements, you might have passed the test. Due to the exam considerations though, you cannot pass the test using this presentation.
nightrain 2 / 3  
Mar 1, 2023   #3
Further explanation for P2 'Furthermore...view about school' will make this reason more convincible, why asking children to do homework will positively affect their relationship with their parents.


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