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(IELTS essay) disappearing languages good or bad?



joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 3, 2012   #1
Many languages are disappearing every year. Is this is a bad thing or could have fewer languages help bring people together.

Globalization and liberalization made the world to shrink into the size of a village. Unfortunately, this means that smaller languages are in danger of extinction. Some people fear the loss of cultural identity, while others believe that the world with less language is better. In this essay, I will explain why I feel that we should preserve local languages.

Language is the main tool of communication between people. A community's language is bond up with its culture and identity. Therefore, it may be difficult to preserve one without another. Secondly, the loss of diversity may also deprive us of different ways of looking at the world. Thirdly, when an unwritten and unrecorded language disappears, it is a loss of science. Rapid reduction of world's language is making it increasingly hard to trace when and how people involved. Lastly, fewer languages do not necessarily mean better communication. As more people speak one language, it became easier for billions to be influenced by shallow media or aggressive politicians.

However, there might be a lot to be gained from having fewer languages. People feel, unity, equality and encourage economical development. Besides, it may reduce the problem of translation, reduce misunderstandings, speed up travel between countries, and boost business. Other major problem is marginalization. Communities who do not speak a major world language may fall behind in science, technology and their economies suffer. Another point is that having less languages might mean more shared ideas. Global collaboration could happen instantly rather than taking years. Although some people are afraid of the loss of culture and identity, it seems that, good ideas can survive. For instance, we are not speaking Latin or Greek, the values of their philosophers are remained with us.

To conclude, diversity is the beauty of the nature. After analyzing both sides, I feel that, dying small languages is not a good trend. Therefore, let us try to keep these minority languages as a part of this diversity.

Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 4, 2012   #2
This is a very interesting topic. And you have presented good essay.
Here are a few suggestions. :)

Is this is a bad thing or could have fewer languages help bring people together.

Many languages are disappearing every year. Is this bad for the world or is it going to help unify the human race?

Globalization and liberalization made the world to shrink into the size of a village.

.... You are talking about the world becoming a global village right??
The world has become a global village and many languages have been forgotten during the process.

Language is the main tool of communication between people. A community's language is bond up with its culture and identity. Therefore, it may be difficult to preserve one without another.

.... This is a very good point..

This is actually a good essay. I hope my suggestions were helpful..
OP joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 4, 2012   #3
hai Pahan..

Thanks for spending your valuable time for me. you pointed my mistakes.

I got the question as it is. I forgot to check it with my last year collection of questionier.

:second one :
As an opening sentence i wrote it, because that time i felt i can co-relate it.
Anyway nice sentence. I hope my 1st two sentences i can replace with your one scentence.
Thank for your support.
Thanks again..
Tessy

wrote it
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Dec 4, 2012   #4
No problem. :) If you rewrite your essay post it here. I'm more than happy to help.

People feel, unity, equality and encourage economical development.

....
I'm sorry I didn't see this before. I don't quite understand what you mean by people feel.

Another point is that having less languages might mean more shared ideas.

It would be easier to share ideas if everybody speaks one language.

To conclude, diversity is the a beauty of the nature.

... Nature has many things to make it beautiful. Diversity is just one of them. Therefore you will have to use 'a' instead of 'the'. :)
OP joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 4, 2012   #5
Hai pahan...

Thanks for the second time reading..

People feel unity, equality and it encourages economical development.
( A comma supply, mistake) thanks..

:'Diversity is the beauty of the nature'

It a sentance as it is.. Like
'Knowledge is power'.

Nature contains so many things say for example, butterfly, rose flower.
Though the name indicate one catogary there are verieties in itself. Buterfly not the same colour but different colour are a feast to the eyes..

:the third one..
I am not arguing for single language.
Say for example, in India there is different official languages in each state (some more than one.) If two or three laungages, more people can share ideas easily.

In canada english and french, talk either languages. It is easiar than more than three official languages..

Any way i like your curiosity...And great pleasure to replay you...

Keep it up

Thanks again..
Tessy..
colin 23 / 47  
Dec 14, 2012   #6
People feel, unity, equality and encourage economical development.
-->>economic development

Besides, it may reduce the problem of translation, reduce misunderstandings, speed up travel between countries, and boost business.
-->>it may address the problem

Another point is that having less languages might mean more shared ideas.
-->>Another point is that having less languages might mean more ideas which can be shared with other


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