IELTS 2 - should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods?

Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.

Students who are noisy and disobedient should be grouped together and taught separately.
Do you agree or disagree?

The issue of should disruptive school students have specialized treatments and other teaching methods is certainly a controversial one. Despite the opinions from some people suppose it is relatively appropriate, I personally disagree with that. The following essay will illustrate two principle reasons why my view is on the opposite.

One point which I consider to be absolutely vital is that school is like a lesser society which offers an environment for students to nurture their social interactive ability. Students, for instance, could learn how to cooperate together in order to complete reports efficiently. In addition, they could also learn how to cope with obstacles while confronting misconception. Therefore, if schools still decide to group students separately, students would definitely lose the opportunity to interact with different types of other students and to improve their interpersonal communicative competence.

Further and even more importantly, I am of the opinion that every student is distinguished and have different talents in various fields which may even not be opted as a school subject. Such as on one hand, some of the students may be fond of going outside and photographing rather than calculating geometry and algebra. On the other hand, some of the students might be noisy and unconcentrated during a biology class. Nonetheless, they could immerse themselves immediately into an incredible fascinating world of hip-pop music. Hence, separating students would only hurt them badly and could even deteriorate present circumstances.

In conclusion, I believe that every student is unique no matter how many A or F they can obtain in an exam. As a result, I personally do not agree with the idea that disruptive school students should be categorized specially and taught individually.

Hallo dear members, I plan to participate in IELTS in this August. This essay is my first IELTS essey and my goal is to score at least brand 6 in task 2 after a three moths writing practice. Is that possible for me after you guys read my Task 2 above. Best regards:)

You did not discuss the situation of disruptive students in class. You changed the prompt discussion totally. You only discussed students who have a different character from others. Which, as can be seen in your discussion, does not relate to disruptiveness in class. You have to remember that disruptive student can prevent his classmates from learning either in a group or classroom setting because he does not allow the lesson to be taught properly. As such, he prevents the other students from learning. Which is why the teachers would like to separate them from the rest of the class.

You probably know the disruptive student as the class clown. The one who always makes the class laugh or is always scolded by the teacher for not paying attention, or he is doing something opposite to what the rest of the class is doing. These are the disruptive actions that prove to be a negative influence on the others. He is a negative influence because he breaks the concentration and focus from the class lesson onto his antics instead. The class ends with the teacher just scolding the disruptive student, and the rest of the class was not taught the lesson for the day.

So your overall discussion is incorrect. It is not related to the given discussion topic. You have to learn to analyze the question before you start writing. When you make a mistake in understanding the keyword, in this case "disruptive", you will not be able to discuss the essay based on the expected information or standards. The point of the essay, is that the disruptive students do not learn in the manner that the rest of the class does, so they should be taught in a separate method or class.

It is true, school is a form of social environment. However, it is a learning social environment. Students do not go to school to be entertained, they go to school to learn, develop their skills, and nurture their natural abilities. A disruptive student prevents that learning environment from succeeding because he is there not to learn, but just to have fun. Your overall defense is improper. While there are no right or wrong answers, your response should at least show that you understand the main point of the discussion. In this case, you failed to understand what the discussion is all about. The only time a disruptive student would be welcome in the learning community would be during recess, lunch break, and after school during extra curricular activities. That is the only time when the learning method is informal and would allow him to be as disruptive as he wishes to be. That is the only social learning time the students have outside of formal class hours.

As of now, your essay is not worth scoring yet. All I can do with your first essay is assess your English comprehension and writing skills. Unfortunately, your comprehension skills are not strong enough and your writing skills need to be further honed. You do not know how to find the keywords and analyze the topic for a proper discussion yet. You have to outline the discussion to find the keywords:

Topic: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.
Discussion Reason: Students who are Disruptive school students should be grouped together and taught separately.
Discussion Question: Do you agree or disagree?

You failed to understand the discussion reason. The keywords and phrases being: Disruptive school students, a negative influence on others. Students who are noisy and disobedient, grouped together and taught separately.

Your discussion paragraphs should have focused on a defense or agreement based on the 3 keywords. One paragraph for each keyword topic. The discussion paragraphs would have been:

Reasoning 1: When a student tends to distract (synonym for disruptive) the class , his classmates cannot learn well.
Reasoning 2: His being troublesome (another synonym) makes him an unfavorable influence on his peers because...
Reasoning 3: Based on these considerations, it appears that segregating (synonym for separately) the disorderly student might have...

The above discussion outline is what I would have used. You may have used a different outline because you disagreed with the statement, but you still need to use the synonyms for the keywords in your presentation as I did above.

Dear Mr. Holt,

Thank you for giving me so many useful advice that I could use in the coming days. Though I was a little bit frustrated with the result, it seems to be I still have a large space to improve my writing skills. I will keep practicing. Today I just finished another Task 2 essay and I hope this time I did not change the prompted discussion and could be worth scoring. Any way, if there are any improper way which is used in my essay, please just let me know. Thank you very much!

Best wishes:)