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education is important in the development of the country. Discuss.


minnie then 1 / -  
Jul 8, 2013   #1
good night to everyone...
my teacher have give me a one tiltle ( education is important in the development of the country. Discuss)
I have 5 point to elaborate but I 'm not sure is correct or not.
1. born the professional person.
2. increase the economy of country.
3. increase the opportunity of employment.
4. increase the quality of our daily life
5.decrease the society problem in country.

can your any idea , thanks...

([b]sorry, my English is not good, in aspect writing... =) )

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Jul 8, 2013   #2
([b]sorry, my English is not good, in aspect writing... =) )

Don't worry... all of us are here to improve English .... so let's help each other for a common goal :)

I wish to align what you've said above with your topic;
1. Education helps people understand good morals and differentiate between right and wrong or good and bad. Therefore, it enables a country to have its nation more disciplined and productive.

2. Educated people can contribute largely to their country's economy by making contributions with their skills and competencies.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 8, 2013   #4
I think others have provided you good suggestions for your essay content. This is my suggestion for your essay structure;
Write an introductory paragraph (should be your first paragraph). There tell the reader briefly about the importance of having an educated nation. Then move on to your body paragraphs (with your second paragraph) and in each para, tell one reason as to why education is important for a country. Then support each of these reasons with good examples. Finally, write the conclusion to re-instate your position.


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