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IELTS task 2: EDUCATION-TEACHERS (both views and opinion)



Paul16 5 / 7  
Jun 12, 2021   #1

teaching not only academic knowledge?



Some people believe that teachers should be responsible for teaching students the difference between right and wrong. Others say that teachers should only teach academic subjects.

Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


In general, education has been considered to broaden knowledge for humankind over the past decades. As a result, varied people believe tutors should only focus on academic lessons at school, however, they also do play a vital role in imparting ethical values to learners. This essay will discuss both views and express the author's opinion.

Without a doubt, moral lessons would significantly instruct students to avoid detrimental actions in society. Specifically, morality teaches human beings to distinguish good things from harmful ones, furthermore, to know how to build and maintain social relationships in real life. For instance, during school time, tutors can educate children on how to communicate with adults and the elderly in the right manner. Meanwhile, it is a popular belief that academic subjects are more practical in higher education and future occupations, however, it is inevitable that teaching morality effectively prevents disrespectful actions throughout the whole life.

Equally important, being taught the difference between right and wrong at a young age can help children maintain that good behavior in the future. It is obvious that children learn from surrounding people since childhood and they are unlikely to change it when they grow up. On the other hand, many would argue parents and family can also be responsible for morally instructing children, hence, it is said that teachers should focus more on academic lessons as subject specialists, instead. Nevertheless, dedicated teachers would support imparting ethical values to children in order to help students realize and know how to treat others in the right manner.

In conclusion, I think dedicated teaches should not only provide students with the academic knowledge but also educate them to become good people in society. It is also recommended that parents and relatives should also significantly contribute to teaching children the difference between right and wrong alongside tutors.

I will be glad to see your feedback and suggestions. Thanks in advance!

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15366  
Jun 13, 2021   #2
author's opinion.

You are the author right? Why are you referring to yourself in 3rd person when your opinion should be directly provided in first person pronoun style? You should not be restating the discussion instructions at this point since you previously stated it already. Your direct opinion is all that was required in this paragraph.

I think dedicated teaches

2 errors here. First, being your personal opinion presentation, this needs to be as fully reasoned and explained as the first 2 discussion points. It needs its own paragraph presentation. second, you cannot convince the reader of your opinion if you do not wholly support your point of view. You are given a TA score based on opinion clarity. This phrase does the exact opposite, showing your uncertain support for your belief /opinion. It will drag down your TA score. With regards to the L R error, it is teachers not teaches. p roof read for errors and correct them to avoid score deductions.


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