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EILTS Writing Taks 1 Summary Ted The New Direction of Indonesia's Creative Culture



Alamsyah Ismail 24 / 38  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
Indonesian people are high creative art person that had been famous in other countries. So many evidence from culture that can explain the skills which are full of art technique such as Borobudur temple, Wayang, Gamelan, Batik also. But, how about Indonesian product? Actually array of adolescent in Indonesia have a lot original products which can established into global market, and at the time the world was ready to embrace Indonesian product.

Recently, the goverment of China made one huge exhibition in Shanghai which can cover 750.000 mini square of spaces. That means the authority really doing something to support their economic creative especially young generation local brands. So how about Indonesia? What the goverment do? We can say "Nothing". So that's way Indonesian creator cannot wait and hope with the goverment. And should create an independent Indonesian departement store which can accredit local brands and sell it in there.

MJT 5 / 8  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
Hi Alamsyah
here are my suggestions,

So many evidence from the culture that can explain ...
Actually, array of the adolescent in Indonesia have a lot of original products ...
Recently, the govermentgovernment of China made one huge ...
What the govermentgovernment do?
... cannot wait and hope with the govermentgovernment .


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