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IELTS-Elder people should be looked after by family members or professionals?



joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 22, 2013   #1
In some countries people are not taking care of their elderly relatives - instead trained professionals are used to care for the elderly. Do you see this as a positive or a negative development?

Old age is an unavoidable condition and incurable disease. Nowadays young generation is interested to shift their elder relatives to old age homes where the service of the professionals is available. However, I feel that, it is a negative trend.

Life is not a bed of roses. Elder people in their young life faced a lot of hardships to bring up their children. They are the one who let us walk, speak and face the world. For young people caring their old relatives in their later lives is an excellent opportunity to show their gratitude for giving them a chance to see this wonderful world in very good manner.

Secondly, it is the moral duty of the young people to look after their older parents or relatives. Their attitude towards elder people is an example for the small children of the family and society. Through the behavior of their parents towards their grandparents indulge them the good qualities of how to behave with an old person, how to look after them and so on. it in turn favorable for the young generation as they become old, these small children will look after them in a better way, as they know how their parents interacted with their grandparents.

Lastly, in the evenings of life, these senior citizens deserve fondness and consideration from their own family members. Since they are more attached to their home and its surroundings, it will be a mental trauma for them to live in an old age home. The elder people like to see their children and children and spend time with them. It keeps them relaxed and provide fulfillment.

To conclude, in this materialistic world, people are becoming more selfish and run to achieve more. Still, we should understand the importance of the elder people and the hardships they overcome for us. Therefore, I feel, it is better to give the affection and attention of the family members and not the presence of professionals in the old age home.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 22, 2013   #2
Perfect introduction :)

Elder people in their young life have faced a lot ofmany hardships to bring up their children.

.... the way you've written is not incorrect, but I introduced these changes in hope they improve its presentation more :)

They are the ones who let us walk, speak and face the world.

They are the people who got us walk, speak, learn manners and face challenges in the world.

I think you are quite good with this task now.... You may keep practicing until last day to keep yourself ready for the exam and we will surely keep providing comments to your essays.

But now you can concentrate on other tasks too :) You are now quite prepared :D
OP joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 22, 2013   #3
Hai dumi..

Thanks for your support and comments...
I am valuing your comments most...
Your sentences are awsome...

I already started our online speaking one hour (both sides two hours)
daily with my little brother...).

Reading is the most confusing task for me..

Graphs i started once but i am not able to upload the diagrams..so i dropped. i will see some soln for this..

Listening also i will start soon...

Thanks for your valuable correction especially for the tips..

Can you tell any resourecs to collect speaking vocabulary to improve speeaking..

Thanks a lot...
Tessy.
Callie0202 5 / 14  
Jan 22, 2013   #4
For young people caring their old relatives in their later lives is an excellent opportunity to show their gratitude to the parents and give them a chance to see this wonderful world in very good manner.

overall, very good try.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 23, 2013   #5
Reading is the most confusing task for me..

I agree with you.... That's pretty tough and I guess it is the toughest :)

Can you tell any resourecs to collect speaking vocabulary to improve speeaking.

I had lots of help from JASON RENSHAW's , english-itutor.com site while I was preparing for TOEFL. Since IELTS too follow very similar task structures, you may be able to get help and tips from this site. I think you can get free help too.
devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 24, 2013   #6
additional vocabularies--> sacrifice and hard work to bring up their children
OP joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 25, 2013   #7
Hai...
Dumi, Dev and Han,

Hai Dumi..
Thanks for the site id..
It was filttered from here, but my little brother searched the site and told me there is only recording of the speaking and not any feed back...(.

Thanks for the information...):

Hai dev..
Thanks a lot..

Hai Han..
Thanks for your time..
Tessy


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