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IELTS task 1: Electricity source in Australia and France over a-20 year


SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 4, 2014   #1
The pie charts illustrates the total electricity's number in Australia and France in the field of fuel source over a 20 year from 1980 to 2000.

Overall, total electricity production in both countries increase dramatically, while France' production doubled over a period of 20 years, Australia reckoned 70 % increase of the total production. Besides, the electricity sources were different in both countries under review.

As per the pie charts, coal production in Australia increased noticeably from 50 to 130 units. In comparison with the similar electricity source in France being accounted with 25 percent in both statistic' year, such trend showed a 80 percent increase. Similarly, hydro power in Australia rose around 16 percent while nuclear power in France had almost ninefold increase in full loan of electricity support. Standing in contrast, the electricity sourcing from natural gas of both countries decreased sharply. Australia experienced 18 percent reductions from 20 units in 1980 to just 2 units in 2000 while France showed a larger 23 percent reduction from 25 to 2 units over 20 years under review.

A more detailed look at the pie charts revealed that the overall changes in percentages in Australia and France was not always similar. While the Australia's oil production experience a two-fifth decline, from 10 to 2 units, such production in France raised 5 percent increase over the measurement. However, it is obvious that the larger of total electricity production in France was supported by the immense growth of nuclear power whereas did not occurred in the Australia charts.





MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
May 5, 2014   #2
The pie charts illustrates the total electricity's number in Australia and France in the field of fuel source over a 20 year from 1980 to 2000.

The pie charts illustrate the changes in the amount of fuel used in electricity generation in Australia and France from 1980 to 2000.

Overall, total electricity production in both countries increaseincreased dramatically, while France' production doubled over a period of 20 years, Australia reckoned 70 % increase of the total production . Besides, the electricity sources were different in both countries under review.

You don't need to give data in your overview. Also, pay attention to the tense used in your essay.

coal production

This is not about the production of coal. It is about the electricity production generated from coal.

In comparison with the similar electricity source in France being accounted with 25 percent in both statistic' year , such trend showed a 80 percent increase.

The data are not given in percentage terms so this sentence is inaccurate. The rest of your body paragraphs also has the same problem.

A more detailed look at the pie charts revealed that the overall changes in percentages in Australia and France was not always similar.

I feel that this sentence does not add more value to your paragraph.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 6, 2014   #3
The pie charts illustrates

The pie chart illustrates / The pie charts illustrate

Overall, total electricity production in both countries increase dramatically, while France' production doubled over a period of 20 years, Australia reckoned 70 % increase of the total production. Besides, the electricity sources were different in both countries under review.

Here you have forgotten the rule :D .... OVERVIEW( state the main trend/ trends in the graph. Don't give detail such as data here) .... So, you should not have data in this overview. They should go to your detail body paras.
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 6, 2014   #4
Here you have forgotten the rule :D .... OVERVIEW( state the main trend/ trends in the graph. Don't give detail such as data here) .... So, you should not have data in this overview. They should go to your detail body paras.

hiihiiiiihihi, again and again @.@
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
May 6, 2014   #5
... :D ... Well, stick to Introduction, Overview and Detail Body para approach. Our recommended approaches not only aim at helping you score with essential features of the task, but also managing time efficiently. That is why we keep trying to help others to align with the approach. Our only wish is that you would get a very good score at the exam and we would be very pleased :)
OP SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
May 6, 2014   #6
Our only wish is that you would get a very good score at the exam and we would be very pleased :)

I hope so, Pahan. As the examination face closer, I need to do harsh, thank you.


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