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Environment challenges: water pollution, air pollution, hazardous waste dumps and acid rain



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Sep 20, 2016   #1
Summary TED: New Thinking on the Climate Crisis

Mr. Al Gore, a speaker of TEDtalk about Climate Crisis, told us that environment challenges such as water pollution, air pollution, hazardous waste dumps and also acid rain become an environmental problem. But the most crucial problem that rarely happened on the earth is a climate crisis. We must pay our attention to this issue because everything has affected. We have work to do and give our global solutions exactly.

He gives us the real example such in the North Polar ice cap (Greenland). It has decreasing amount areas of the ice cap in the summer season and will come back in the winter season as well. Not as a permanent ice, but look likes a vulnerable ice. Global warming takes a part this condition, which caused of human activities. He said that, in the fact this issue being the last problem to solve. Thus, it would be our task to takes a part of it.

eve01 24 / 21  
Sep 20, 2016   #2
hi there^^
it is nice summary
but i will give you some corrections

>>Mr. Al Gore, a speaker of TED thought about Climate Crisis, told us that (...) and also acid rain become anthe environmental problems

>>He givesgave us the real example such in the North Polar ice cap (Greenland)

>>Not as a permanent ice, but look likes a vulnerable ice >> it is not a permanent ice but it looks like a vulnerable

(s+v+o .... but s+v+o....)

hope it helps ^^^


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