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IELTS TASK 2 ON equality for women in work

judy65996 1 / -  
May 29, 2023   #1
Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women.

What is your opinion?

Some people said that men and women are equal so women can do any job they like. Others think that women can not do certain jobs which are not suitable for them. I agree that female is able to do any job they want.

Some people think that female is less physically active than male so they are not suitable to do manual work. However, some female are bigger, faster and stronger than male. They are more competent than men to do manual work which needs high energy such as porters, construction workers and brick masons.

Traditionally, technology is male-dominated field and women are discriminated against in the tech industry. It is said that technology is man's club, woman will not fit in. However, some female prove that they have the ability to work in tech positions and even perform better than male. Furthermore, female tech workers understand the demand from female customers so that they can balance the product design to make female clients accept their product and foster the growth of woman-related product.

In conclusion, women can do any job they want. The society should break the stereotype of women and encourage women to pursue any job they like.
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May 30, 2023   #2
The essay is composed of only 202 words. It is non-word compliant as the expected minimum count is 250 words. Given the circumstances of the missing word count, the essay will start with a failing score overall. That is because of the word count percentage deduction that will be applied to the essay. It is almost impossible to recover from these type of scoring problems. You will definitely have a failing score at the end.

You need to also understand that you cannot simply mimic the original presentation. You have not presented the original idea in your own words, based on your own understanding. You are merely substituting words in the presentation rather than proving your English comprehension skills. These are the main observable weaknesses in your essay that you should address in your next writing. I will not go into further detail at this point since this is your first essay and you should fix these problems first so you can get a better score next time.
chanhthi1506 1 / 2  
Jun 9, 2023   #3
the essay sadly quite short and may result in failing score, you should add 1,2 examples in 2 paragraph in order to make your point more valid

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