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Expressing concern : Environmental Damage VS Rise in standard of Living



Prem 1 / 2  
Nov 29, 2012   #1
Prompt- With advent in technology and modernisation our lifestyle has routed towards the luxurious road. We are now harnessing our environment like anything to need our ever growing greed.

Assignment - DAMAGE TO THE ENVIRONMENT IS AN INEVITABLE CONSEQUENCE OF WORLDWIDE IMPROVEMENTS IN THE STANDARD OF LIVING. DISCUSS

Everything around us which we feel, hear and see is Environment. We don't care a lot about the well-being of environment in which we live, in case if we do, we are only concerned with the niche locality were we reside. We generally miss the whole picture; environment is ours and we have to take care of it anywhere either locally or globally and at any time.

The rise in standard of living has in many ways made us negligent/careless about environment. We do take care of minute environmental issues here and there. But do we really care about environment; bit of introspection needs to be done. With day by day increase in the standard of living, lifestyle has become complex and totally dependent on technology or rather on convenient. Things that could have been done earlier without use of technology or modernity are seldom now done so. For example with the rise in income level people now prefer to travel in private vehicles instead of in public transport system.

Natural resources are exploited in abundance to meet the increasing requirement of energy. The location from where the resources is extracted its environment is totally disturbed and the whole ecology of that place is disturbed, e.g. in Coal and mineral mining and oil wells. When these resources are burnt for specific purposes they create a huge amount of global warming gases. This affects the whole world's ecological and environmental balance.

The industrial revolution is still continuing to prosper at a rapid pace. People require certain specific finished products to make their life convenient. A lot of resources and minerals, etc.. are required to make that product. In the process a lot of waste is generated which hampers the aerial and aqua environment. Sometimes harmful wastes generated by these industries get into our food chain and cause havoc (illness/epidemic/endemic) in the long/short run.

It seems rise in standard of living is a curse for environment. Certain strict rules and regulations need to be made to check the exploitation of environment. To contain the effect of waste and industrial by products certain checks is required both from government side and from public side. If people become concern about the environment then individual efforts like constraining us to what we exactly need in terms of services and products or goods. The quantity/demand of such things will decrease and eventually will reduce the impact of standard of living on the environmental.

joythblessy 86 / 266  
Nov 30, 2012   #2
hai...

Please write clearly which type of essay it is..?
leeminh 5 / 17  
Nov 30, 2012   #3
you are in trouble with task response. First sentence is seen as a cause/effect essay but they ask you to discuss which means you should examine both side pros and cons of this situation. Is that right ?
OP Prem 1 / 2  
Dec 1, 2012   #4
hi..joythblessy,
I didnt get what you exactly asked for?
I have taken up writing essay as a hobby and wanted to get some valuable feedback on it. So i posted it on this forum.? Can you pl give some inputs about my essay.

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hi leeminh .
Thanks for your valuable feedback.. I have tried to justify the cons mostly as environmental damage is no where beneficial.. may be i was bessotted to this aspect of environment only. Next time i will try to meet both the ends.

Cheers.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 1, 2012   #5
we are only concerned with the niche locality werewhere we reside.

.... I guess it's a typo : )

environment is ours and we have to take care of it anywhere either locally or globally and at any time.

This is what I suggest ;
Environment is ours and it has a profound influence on our existence. Therefore it is our duty to take care of our environment irrespective of any geographical or time barriers.

We do take care of minute environmental issues here and there.

Your idea is not conveyed with clarity .... Why not rephrase this sentence?

dependent on technology or rather on convenient convenience.

... convenience is the right word here : )

It seems that rise in standard of living standards is a curse for environment. ----------- The people caused this situation through their selfishness and carelessness : )
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Dec 1, 2012   #6
Hai...

Before adding anything I just wants to know that this essay is for IELTS or not.
I know only structure of IELTS essays...!
In the starting of your essay, you wrote 'prompt, assignment' which confused me.

Anyway, thanks for your response.

Best of luck,
Tessy
OP Prem 1 / 2  
Dec 1, 2012   #7
hai joythblessy,
This essay is not for IELTS. I wrote it just out of my interest.
Thanks for your response.

Cheers
Prem

Hi Duminda,
Thanks for your valuable feed back. You scrutinised my essay so minutely. This kind of errors are often overlooked by me, thanks again for correcting me.

Take care
Cheers
Prem


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