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Today, fashion is becoming more and more important in choosing clothes. What are the reasons?



jjgenius 2 / 3  
Jul 12, 2022   #1

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The more human fundamental need increases, the more crucial clothing selection becomes. While stylishly dressing is highly valued for themselves, this trend also has some detrimental effects on our communities.

Undeniably, fashion plays an indispensable role in the contemporary world. Firstly, one of the most significant reasons is that fashion is a fantastic opportunity for individuals' self-expression and character traits. Precisely, people entitle themselves to choose and wear whatever they relish. One enthusiastically pursues chic style; one wants to follow a street style or another craves to mix any beautiful items in their own way. As a result, creatively dressing boosts energy to love and value themselves, which remarkably contributes to their comfort and confidence in their life. At the same time, clothing selection choices benefit the general public to develop their creativity.

However, there are several negative influences on our environment obtained from this trend. These days, a large number of people are highly interested in fast fashion because of its reasonable price. If we purchase luxurious brands that we do not actually need or wear once and discard them, we will live in a throw-away society. Therefore, a sheer volume of natural resources are wasted, and excess products are unconsciously thrown into the environment. Furthermore, those who are unaffordable with extravagant clothes, especially youngsters, may spend a lot of money or even get into debt, which puts pressure on the family's financial means.

In conclusion, although fashion makes a beneficial contribution to our confidence and creativity, it also poses some catastrophic consequences on the environment and strains on a family's financial stability.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15384  
Jul 12, 2022   #2
Fashion is not portrayed as a fundamental need in the first presentation. Therefore, it should notbe interpreted as such in the writer's version. This creates a topic misfocus that alters the original intention of the topic. The rewording must always be true to the original.That means not overstating the topic or changing the basis of the discussion.

While it is nice to read the discussion instruction and question interpretation of the author, what the opening statement actually requires are sentence outline responses to both questions as these set the stage for the more comprehensive discussion paragraphs. That is sorely missing in the first paragraph.

The discussion approach is appropriate. This is a well-developed comprehensive response that has just the right mix of presentations, transitions, and vocabulary to get a passing score or more. Word off caution though, do not over present the reasons. An additional reasoning topic at the end of a paragraph that does not develop further will reduce the score.
Iwilltrymybest 3 / 7  
Jul 18, 2022   #3
you need give an exact example to clarify your idea in the second paragraph. Why stay fashionable can be a burden? any clue? why i need to believe that while you do not provide any evidence for that
OP jjgenius 2 / 3  
Jul 19, 2022   #4
@Iwilltrymybest
thanks for your advice


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