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The figure of household internet access in different areas in a European country


IqbalThemi 44 / 46 13  
Apr 16, 2015   #1
The graph gives information regarding to the number of the household internet access in two different areas in a European country between 1999 and 2004 and it is measured in percentage. Overall, it can clearly be seen that although both locations were in upward trend of household internet access, the percentage of household internet access in urban/suburban area experienced a significant increase. On the other hand, a slow rise of rural location was over the periods.

With regard to this trend, the figure of household internet access of rural/suburban was rise. In 1999, it stood at approximately 15% which was around 12% higher than the household internet access of rural area. Following of this, the number of household internet access in rural area rose twofold at 30% in the next year. Whereas, during 2001 and 2002 it increased at 40% to 50% respectively, it inclined again slowly to about 55% in 2004.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the graph reveals that, in rural area, the number of household internet access witnessed a gradual rise. It was from at about 3% in 1999 to at around one in twenty in 2000 and this trend continued in the following years before the figure reached a short peak in 2002, at half of the whole percentage. After of this, the percentage of household internet access in rural area just rose steadily by approximately 2% in 2003 to finish in 2004, at more than half.




cldales /  
Apr 16, 2015   #2
Please note the following:
regarding = on
European country = just state the country
it can clearly be seen = it is clear that
the percentage of = you can also use "the proportion of"
household = homes
internet access = you can also say " access to the internet"
With regard to this trend = delete this (less academic)
it inclined again = wrong grammar (it rose again)
Following of this, = wrong grammar (less academic)
Moving to a more detailed analysis from the graph reveals that, = (too sensational, less academic)


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