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Finding an ideal community now a days has become a major problem. Vadalism is the threat.



shalini singh 14 / 23  
Apr 27, 2010   #1
Finding an ideal community now a days has become a major problem.Beside theft and bad neighbourhood, vadalism is the threat which has scared people more in community

Vandalism i feel is one of the crucial problem terrifying the residents.Eventhough community has a good neighbourhood still incidents of vandalisms are recorded,the reason behind is not the people living in the community or its neighbourhood. These activities are mostly done by young highschool students passing by the neighbourhood.Vandalists are not the people whose activities are as a result of there poor living and fight for bread,but these are our young generation people with the problem in their minds.Usually vandals are young school going childrens with lack of proper values to live a life and be a good citizen. Apparently the problem exists in their family and the values which they get from them.

Recently i was one of the sufferor of these vandals.We live in a pretty decent community,most of the residents are well educated. Eventhough our community is one of the good community with only few awful activity being recorded in a past, has become prone to the activity of vandalisms.

Couple of months before i baught a very expensive and luxiourious car, which was my passion since i was a child. I always wanted to be rich for cars. I accept that it was My carelessness that i left the car outside, but it was only for small duration of time. We were inside our house watching tv and my car got broked. To check for the noice i came out and i was flabgergasted to see my car being broken. Vandals did broke my car not to have gagets or someother things from car, Just for fun and because of their unconcious thoughts they broke an expensive car. Similar incidence took place few months back in the car of my neighbour. We can make out that now my community has become unsafe, particularly for expensive car owners.

Our community people gathered for a meeting to plan precauctionary measures for these activities of vandalism. We now have a camera in the house which will record all kind of activities taking place in the community, additionally we have also have plans to stop any suspecious

person if seen and inquire about identity and where about of that person.

I hope that eventually we will get hold on these activities by our present plan of action against them.Indeed we should work on stopping these problems from germinating and it can only be possible when parents of these young children,apparently every parent pass on good values to there children. Parents should take time out from their busy schedules to find out what there young child is doing and hanging out with.

OP shalini singh 14 / 23  
Apr 27, 2010   #2
Please help me with the essay writing, i am Preparing for Cbest exam and i am not able to score well here.
Thanks
Shalini
mbiscoe25 3 / 8  
Apr 27, 2010   #3
I am not sure what you thesis is. I find having a clear theses makes the writing process easier for me.
OP shalini singh 14 / 23  
Apr 27, 2010   #4
Thanks Marge for replying and asking.

Actually its not thesis, i am just practicing essay writing for CBEST, Have appeared couple of times couldn't scored well.As english is not my first langauge as i lag behind.

I really want to get through this time so the topic i wanted to write was on community problems and according to me what is the most serious one.

Sorry look my topic itself is not clear

Thanks
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Apr 29, 2010   #5
Vandalism, I feel, is one of the crucial problems terrifying the residents.
(Use a capital I instead of i)

Even though a community has a good neighbourhood, still incidents of vandalisms are recorded, and the reason behind is not the people living in the community or its neighbourhood. These activities are mostly done by young high school students passing by the neighbourhood. Vandals are not the people whose activities are as a result of there their poor living and fight for bread, but these are citizens of our young generation -- people with the problem in their minds.

You can just say "school children"
Usually vandals are young school going children who lack proper values to live a life and be a good citizen.

Apparently the problem exists in their families and the values which they promote . ---- good sentence!!
Recently i was one of the sufferers of these vandals.
Use a spell checker! :-)

A couple of months before, I bought a very expensive and luxiourious car, which was my passion since i was a child. I always wanted to be rich so that I could have great cars. I accept that it was my carelessness that ...

Our community people gathered for a meeting to plan precautionary measures for these activities of vandalism. We now have a camera in the house which will record all kind of activities taking place in the community. Additionally, we have also have plans to stop any suspicious person if seen and inquire about identity and where about business of that person.

I hope that eventually we will get hold on these activities by implementing our present plan of action against them. Indeed we should work on stopping these problems from germinating, and it can only be possible when parents of these young children apparently every parent pass on good values to there children. Parents should take time out from their busy schedules to find out what there young child is doing and hanging out with.

the ending is very nice!! I was reading and adolescents are still developing some parts of their brains, continuing to develop until age 20. They really enjoy the "rush" of excitement from breaking a rule, but they have not fully developed their prefrontal cortex, which is used to think about consequences of actions!! So, they do terrible things. If we can help them to find excitement in other ways, maybe they will stop breaking stuff...


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