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First impression is an essential appear in workplace - employees should dress smartly - IELTS TASK 2



Anfalia 40 / 46  
Dec 17, 2014   #1
Some organizations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.


First impression is an essential appear in workplace. For this reason, while some corporations argue that perfect dress is prominent for staffers, others believe that managing quality is a crucial factor for business world. However, I strongly argue that companies will progress rapidly when employees are smart in both grooming and work skill.

Appearance enables to influence people and potentially impact of how a business performs effectively. Firstly, appearance creates an excellent impression among colleagues. It dues to they would understand how people are in the first sight from their performance. As an obvious example, when an employee comes to work in a wrinkled shirt, they will likely be perceived as less ambitious and dedicated not in a positive way. As a result, people tend to associate them incapable as an employee. Secondly, appearance can boost a company's public image. When the employees dress in appropriate way, it introduces company to public in a positive way. Thirdly, it helps companies comply with self-care and health because the employees will stay away from dirt performance as to get reputable image.

Conversely, performance is detrimental to company's success. Organizations create a well-rounded approach to managing and coaching work force to require the expertise of an excellent human resources leader. To exemplify, Steeve Job, as the owner of Apple Company, when he wants to promote his project about Pixar animation, he presents smartly to public in order that they accept his new project. Taking account of the example, career progression depends on the abilities which enable to contribute someone's quality of work life.

Ultimately, considering of two arguments which are primary aspect in business world, I personally believe that advanced companies will progress rapidly when they have employees who are expert in job and well-performance. Where possible, companies' authorities should allow employees to have great appearance in appropriate way. Also, they should recruit employees selectively.

Remansou 8 / 23  
Dec 17, 2014   #2
Appearance enables to influence people and potentially impact of how a business performs effectively.

A well-groomed appearance can influence people. It can also have potential impacts on an effective business performance.

It is better to use passive structure. For example: People can be influenced by a well-groomed appearance.

It dues to they would understand how people are in the first sight from their performance.
I am afraid you should rewrite the above.

Good luck!


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