Unanswered [8] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Writing Feedback   % width Posts: 3

Give suggestion: can clothes indicate human's character?


Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Feb 28, 2016   #1
Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


In this contemporary era, fashion plays an equally important role for a physical appearance of people. As such, some people believe that what people wear is related to their character. However, others argue that people should not be judged due to their clothes. This essay will discuss both views while I personally believe that the dress style has a link to human personality.

Having said that the clothes people wear can not indicate who they are because the human's character can not be easily measured by merely seeing their style. An army, for example, may have the same uniform with others, but it cannot indicate how they behave. In addition, nowadays, the big criminals like corruptors are people who wear the best style in their dress, but unfortunately, their actions are not shown their personal character. However, on the other hand, I argue that people style can indicate their characteristic.

Apart from this, it is true there is a relation between what people wear and their personality. To begin, a recent study conducted by Harvard University in 2002 showed that the clothes people wearing indicated their behaviour and their interest related to how they behave. Not only this, people who always wear clothes of the same colour are able to be indicated what is their favorite colour. Moreover, football club's fans are more likely to wear their favorite clubs' jersey means that they tend to show their interest. Furthermore, in my opinion, I highly likely agree that people character can be assessed by what they wear.

To conclude, while some people believe that judging people cannot be measured by their clothes, I do believe what people wear tends to indicate their character.

JuanSebastianR 23 / 63 37  
Mar 1, 2016   #2
Hi Bunglon11,

It is a pleasure to be working with you. This essay is a good start. Here are a few comments:

-Throughout this essay I see a lot of redundancy. Try to minimize the repetition of ideas or prompts, and instead, formulate your own ideas. Read through your essay and find any ideas being repeated.

You used army and corruptors to describe how a person's appearance cannot indicate character. Certainly, an army that wears the same uniform cannot indicate what their character is. Likewise this agrees with firemen, policemen, and so on. Yet I don't think this is a strength for your essay. I would stick with the idea that people can have a good dress style, like corruptors, but simply because they dress nice doesn't mean they are good people. We can assume by looking at someone that they might be important, but we cannot know what actions they carry out to the world. Perhaps you want to say this, instead of pointing out the logic of policemen, firemen, and an army. I think you need to dig a little deeper. Did you do any research for this?

For your third paragraph, you did the same. I don't think it is as strong as it could be. There is a logic that football fans do wear jerseys or that people wear their favorite color. This is not exactly character. You also included a study by Harvard University, yet you just stated the prompt once again here. Instead, what is it that the study found? Is there any data? Are there any character traits that Harvard found to be evidence that character and physical appearance are related?

Instead of stating the logic of things like jerseys and favorite colors, why don't you dig deeper and discuss how certain colors indicate a person's personality. In my example, I used to wear gray and black all of the time. It was my favorite color, yes, but it was also indicating something personal in my life. I was not happy with life at the time and felt depressed and stressed most of the time. Here, I can argue that gray and black indicated my personality. Then, when my life changed for the better, I began wearing bright colors. When I began thinking positive daily, I began using only those colors. Now that I go in my closet, I don't like picking up the gray and black colors because they remind me of a "dark" past. Now this is something deep and strong that you could discuss in your essay. Since you are allowed to do research, why don't you search for "physical appearance and personality traits." You will find a lot of information.

I like your essay. The beginning is good, and I have the corrections. But I think we need to work on the content to be stronger and meaningful rather than stating what we already know.

Please let me know if you need help finding online articles in the subject matter.

Best regards,

Juan Sebastian Rubio Lopez
OP Bunglon11 28 / 31 5  
Mar 6, 2016   #3
Thanks for your explanation.

I still need an assistance for improving my writing skill.
Yes, I need more references if you do not mind.

My Best Regards
Hadi


Home / Writing Feedback / Give suggestion: can clothes indicate human's character?