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IELTS Task 1 : Global population figures and figures for urban populations


tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jan 20, 2014   #1
The graphs below provide information on global population figures and figures for urban populations in different world regions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph illustrates the trend of wold society growth from 1800 to 2100, while the second chart depicts a prediction in the future over a 25-year period.

In general, it can be seen from the graph that the number of global population decreased in the last period (2100), while base on a forcast the majority of population will occur in the non-globalise countries from 2015 to 2040.

A more detailed look at the graph indicates that the number of population started from 1 billion of inhabitants in the 1800 and countinued a slow increase from under 1-to-2.5 billion of population between 1800 and 1950. Moreover, the growth rate rose shaply from the end of 1950 to early 2400 and achieved a peak at 8.2 billion by 2050. The global population suddenly began to decline a slightly from 2050 to 2100 and sat at 6.2 by 2100.

Turning to the chat presents the expectation that almost all populations growth from 2015 to 2040 will occur in cities of non-globalise countries and the number of citizen was a dramatic increase from 2015 onwards. In the globalise regions, however, over 1 billion populations over the next 20-year had not levelling off until the end of the 2040.

Overall, the graphs show that the majority of global population increase will not live in the particular world, but will be greater in some areas than others.




dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 21, 2014   #2
The first graph illustrates the trend of wold society growth from 1800 to 2100, while the second chart depicts a prediction in the future over a 25-year period.

Many students try to replace the words that appear in the prompt with synonyms. It is really not necessary and can be dangerous too. Here you have used the word "society" to replace "population" and it gives a total different meaning. It is ok to use the same words as in your prompt so long as you rephrase the sentence. If you have some appropriate words to replace the words in the prompt, then it's ok. Otherwise use them as they are.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 22, 2014   #3
A more detailed look at the graph indicates that the number of population started from 1 billion of inhabitants in the 1800 and countinued a slow increase from under 1-to-2.5 billion of population between 1800 and 1950.

The line graph shows a slow growth in the population from the year 1800 to 1920 from 1 billion to 2 billion inhabitants. The growth is predicted to accelerate till the year 2040 to a level of 8 billion.

Moreover, theThe growth rate rose shaply from the end of 1950 to early 2400 and achieved a peak at 8.2 billion by 2050. The global population suddenly beganwould begin to decline a slightly from 2050 to 2100 and sat at 6.2 by 2100.

You cannot use past tense because what you see from 2014 onward are their predictions on population growth.
OP tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jan 22, 2014   #4
Well, i try to use 'society' to replace 'population'. thanks for your advice, i will more be carefully.
According to Oxford learner's thesaurus
society : people in general, living together in communities
population : all the people who live in a particular area, city or country.

You cannot use past tense because what you see from 2014 onward are their predictions on population growth.

Yes, i have a mistake in this statement. i should use simple future to depict condition in the next years. thanks pahan.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 22, 2014   #5
society means "the aggregate of people living together in a more or less ordered community" or "an organization or club formed for a particular purpose or activity". So, the impressions made by the two words "people" and "society" are very different though they have some relationship or closeness. Do not have the habit of replacing words with synonyms if you are not sure of their usage. It makes your reading much worse than writing an essay with simple words.


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