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IELTS WRITING TASK 2: IS IT GOOD TO CHANGE?



halleybachelor 16 / 25  
Feb 6, 2014   #1
Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is always some time in life when people have to decide about changes. Some people believe it is always better to experience something different while others believe not. In my opinion, both attitudes have their benefits and drawbacks.

People in favor of change may argue that it is very boring to do the same things throughout their lives. Routine jobs and life styles are more likely to make people less passionate and creative, resulting in lower efficiency and productivity. At the same time, people do not always make right decisions in the first place. If they choose a life or a career which does not suit their personalities or skills, they may lose chances to reach their potentials by remaining at the same status. On the contrary, changes do not only mean new experiences, which tend to have positive effect on people's motivations to live and work, but also mean progress in salaries, positions and living conditions. For skilled workers who have been stuck in a position for a long time, it is very sensible to seek other employers who may provide better opportunities.

On the other hand, there are still many people who prefer not to change, especially when it comes to their jobs. The first reason is that doing a job for years can make people some kind of specialists, who are more likely to be promoted in the same company. Secondly, some companies attach great importance to the loyalty of employees. Those who change jobs frequently may have difficulty in gaining their trust and being employed again. Thirdly, to change a job means a fresh beginning on many occasions. It is not easy for some people to give up what they have had and start from scratch in a different place, especially for those who prefer a steady income.

To recapitulate, the advantages of change are the disadvantages of being stable, and vice versa. People can just make their choices according to their own aspirations and situations.

worrywart93 1 / 4  
Feb 6, 2014   #2
"There is always some time in life when people have to decide about changes . Some people believe it is always better to experience something different, while others believe not ." There will always come a time in life where you have to think about change. Some believe that it is better to experience something different; while others believe it's best not to.

"Routine jobs and life styles " Routine jobs and lifestyles

"The first reason is that doing a job for years can make people some kind of specialists , who are more likely to be promoted in the same company ." The first reason being that committing to a job for a length of time can lead to speciality in that field, and possible promotion.

"Those who change jobs frequently may have difficulty in gaining their trust and being employed again ." Those who change jobs frequently may find difficulty in gaining trust and becoming reemployed.

Good luck!
"Thirdly, to change a job means a fresh beginning on many occasions." Thirdly, changing jobs frequently brings a fresh beginning each time.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 6, 2014   #3
Some people believe it is always better to experience something different while others believeit is notso.
People in favor of change may argue that it is very boring to dorepeat the same things throughout their livesover a long period.

You write extremely well :) However, you need certain features in your essay structure to earn a good score. This body para there is no specific example.
SHanafi 120 / 357  
Feb 17, 2014   #4
I like the way you explain your idea. Better you consider to use Pahan suggestion to make your writing better.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 18, 2014   #5
There is always some time in life when people have to decide about changes.

For everybody, there is a moment in life that they would be demanded to change things from the way they have been done earlier.

On the other hand, there are still many people who prefer not to change, especially when it comes to their jobs.

.... don't narrow down the scope of your topic when you are presenting your reasons to justify your position. You can do that when presenting examples.

On the other hand, there are many people who prefer not to change, but to continue with their accustomed routines. For example, let's take changing jobs.


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