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IELTS - good changes can be brought in life without major difficulties.


Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
May 24, 2013   #1
People naturally resist making change in their lives.
What kind of problems cans this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

People often do not like changes in their lives, and they want to stick to their older lifestyle. Sometimes, changes in lifestyle can lead to various issues in lives and cause unlikely effects.

Firstly, changes in lifestyle come when people move from one place to another: rural to urban area or one country to another. Therefore, they have to experience environmental and language differences. For example, when I went to study abroad, it took me lots of time to adjust and learn language of the new place. As a result, I could not understand much about studies in the beginning, and went through lots of social issues too.

Secondly, changes in lifestyle also cause priority issues. For example, to adjust into new mode of life, people often adopt a different persona. And sometimes, friends and family become their second priority. Another problem of the change is to work in a new environment. It becomes hard for a person to spend most of time of the day in a place where he does not know many people.

An obvious solution to these problems is to adapt to the changes slowly and patiently. For instance, people living abroad should learn the language and be well informed about the customs and traditions of the place, even before going there. Another good idea is for people to become flexible enough to accept the changes without getting panic and confused. And also, they should not transform their personality with environment. Therefore, by doing this, good changes can be brought in life without major difficulties.

kingandre17 1 / 3 1  
May 24, 2013   #2
or example, when I went to study abroad, it took me lots of time to adjust and learn language of the new place.

try naming the place you had to adjust to. It will give readers a better understanding of what your talking about, cause right now it seems vague.
francy 1 / 1  
May 25, 2013   #3
and they want to stick to their older lifestyle

old/former lifestyle would be better.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
May 25, 2013   #4
People naturally resist making change in their lives. What kind of problems cans this cause?

Your prompt suggests that people do not like to change and what problems this attitude can create for them. However, you seem to be in a different track;

Sometimes, changes in lifestyle can lead to various issues in lives and cause unlikely effects.

In my view, this is not what your prompt suggests. What it suggests is that how people be affected negatively when they resist change. So, you need to align your writing accordingly. For example, you talk about moving to new places. You have to put this idea like this;

When people resist change, they may not be able to progress any further in life. For example, suppose a person needs to take up his new job in a city far away from home station. If he is not ready to take up this challenge, then it he would surely be deprived from his promotion and may have his career path stagnated.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
May 25, 2013   #5
People often do not like changes in their lives, and they want to stick to their older lifestyle.

.... very true.... however, I like if you said something about how change is inevitable and therefore people need to perceive change differently.

In my view, this is not what your prompt suggests. What it suggests is that how people be affected negatively when they resist change. So, you need to align your writing accordingly. For example, you talk about moving to new places.

I agree with dumi... You are slightly off-track :(
You have very good writing skills - vocab, grammar etc. Read your prompt carefully and align your writing to what it asks for.
OP Shumaila86 11 / 31 9  
May 25, 2013   #6
thank u o much. i really appreciate ur opinion but please can ye explain how to gather the ideas in paragraph. i never understand.


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