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Do good exam results at school or college guarantee success in life? Discuss the advantages that a good education can have on your future. Do you believe that studying hard will bring a better life?
Topic : exam result guarantee success in life
Discussion : advantages good education on your future
Task :do you believe study hard will bring a better life
Let us see your intro
As a result of studying hard, some people achieving qualified exam results at school or college automatically equate with a time of economic prosperity (discussion ). Although this is surely authentic(fragment sentence), the upside of the scheme outweighs the downside.(main sentence)(thesis statement )
While it is not should be present, adding hook will be better. Further, you are not answer the prompt
Do you believe that studying hard will bring a better life?
Though exams do not perfectly assess a student's mental ability, they are extremely necessary, since they force students to apply their knowledge to real-life situations so as to achieve attainment.
This strength your opinion that examination may not bring success in life. After that you make an example case to support your opinion
Starkly juxtaposed Japan with England and Wales, in 1960s Land of Rising Sun significantly broke superior record in terms of average mathematical exams.
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In this sentence can I said that you want to mention that factor that increase the resut of mathematical exam is because the schoolchildren do practice in JUKU, not merely because the exam.
One of the decisive factors why this record increased was because schoolchildren after hours were sent to JUKU to have extra help and encourage them to work harder.
But, can we assume spending time to study hard will outweigh the upside of the whole success?
This sentence support the former, and strengthen reader attention because you put the main idea in the end.
The second body paragraph answer this prompt
the advantages that a good education can have on your future
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There is a tendency from to every educational institution to expect different things from different people. One illustration is 'STUDY HARD'. The merits of working hard in college which they would take many books to detail are so numerous .
Also, hard work that represents a grueling test leads to better grades.
In this sentence support your opinion in body para 1 that success is not caused by exam.
Result publishes almost 7 million college graduates on excellent grades poured into China's job market in 2013, but this breathtaking report shows the downside: this movement ironically creates the current crunch for idleness. What Jay Walker trying to sample of delights of GAKAO exam in China when speaking to TED could not be taken seriously as a broad parameter to deduce study hard is always the same boat as better life.
This is the contrary opinion with an sample example that study hard (college graduated on excellent grade) also is not exactly linear with good result. The blue is what you mentioned as the contrary opinion in this discussion paragraph.
The third body para answer the propmt
Do you believe that studying hard will bring a better life?
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I deliberate this idea seems dubious.
As far as they could not look towards themselves, they won't be able to enhance their future prospect. They should ponder they are the only piece of equipment that needs turning in order to produce results.
and you give an example to support your opinion
in the conclusion
you give an conclusion conclusion signal
Ultimately,
to have a better life everyone doesn't need to get better results in every school/college exams (final statement based on paraphrasing the prompt). Where possible, they should learn how to live with a thirst for knowledge, which is the vital factor (your opinion to answer the prompt).
As a reader, I think you already answer the prompt implicitly. I suggest you to write the pronoun "I" to make side of your opinion explicitly.