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IELTS TASK 2 : government involvement in people life syle



andial 21 / 48  
Jun 3, 2014   #1
Experts, kindly need your constructive feedback

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Should government make decisions about people's life style, or should people make their own decisions.
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There is no doubt that the inhabitants' life style in one particular country determines some important aspects of country's development. Thus, while some people firmly believe that the government should take a part to decide even regulate folks' way of life, I particularly think that it clearly depends on the circumstances and what part we actually focus on.

The first consideration is related to the urgency of government involvement. It is because the government not only has a responsibility to make a policy in order to keep a harmonization in society, but also keeps trying to educate and let their civilizations become much more mature. Sticking "No Smoking" campaign in public area, for instance, is one of the accepted regulation made by government which has already reached positive feedback from its civilization. This is particularly beneficial to eradicate the high rate of victim because of smoking related-disease.

Having considered the aforementioned account, the involvement of government in another case sometimes invites much criticism. In term of dressing ethic code which is likely to be regulated in Jakarta, for example, is automatically rejected by some group of society as well as practitioner. They have tendency to think that dressing code is clearly private right of every person which is actually protected by the government.

Ultimately, there are pros and cons developing in society concerning the government involvement in case of people' lifestyle. It seems to me that the government should reconsider regarding the feedback from societies which may comes up due to government attitude whether it must be proactive to make a policy regarding such matter or not.

msarkar 8 / 13  
Jun 3, 2014   #2
There is no doubt that the inhabitants' life style in one particular country determines some important aspects of country's development.

Instead of repeating country twice, you can say - "There is no doubt that the inhabitants' life style in one particular country determines some important aspects of its development."
OP andial 21 / 48  
Jun 4, 2014   #3
you are completely right :-). Thank you then
niesaysi 16 / 281  
Jun 5, 2014   #4
Sticking "No Smoking" campaign in public area, for instance, is one of the accepted regulations made by government which has already reachedgained positive feedback from its civilization.

This is particularly beneficial to eradicate the high rate of victimsbecause ofwith smoking related-diseases .

In terms of dressing ethic code...


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