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sandipsinh 37 / 88  
Feb 14, 2014   #1
Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology. Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs. Which one of these opinions do you agree with? Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

Globally technology is ruling world by making tasks much easier and faster. Although technology has great impact in development of the countries, yet many people believes that fulfilling basic necessity is of prime importance. I discern that acceleration of computer technology can satisfy various basic need of the people as such government must invest money in developing or purchasing computer technology .Furthermore my essay will reflect explanation for money spent on computer technology or on basic needs.

Education is an investment that give certain returns. Use of computer technology will make education more prolific. Today many government colleges and schools are provided with the computer lab for the education which make the teaching process smoother and effective. If government will build computer engineering or relevant colleges than student will be motivated to study subject of computer technology. For example Gujarat government has made compute classes mandatory in all schools from 4th grade. By taking steps forward for providing education relevant to computers will build educated and affluent country with least problems.Education resolve almost all problems as such use of computer technologies for education sector will be advantageous for government and residence of all countries.

Secondly, Administrative task cannot be avoided in any sector from government to corporate. If computer will have highly developed software or high tech devices that will reduce the paper -consumption. By avoiding use of trees for making paper, government is providing better living environment to the people. As well storage of data, international meetings through laptop or computers, corporate deals, and order for import and export can be done without any hazels and wasting time. Use of computer technology will collectively accelerate the revenue of the countries. Purchase of peculiarly designed computer relevant technology helps government of several countries to provide safety to their populace like currently, govt of all countries have announced computer hacking or data seizing an unlawful action to provide safe use of computers.Use of computers technology will aid in operating administrative work with all security.

Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of the countries are enable to satisfy their basic needs. But if government make alliance with international companies than many people will get opportunity to conquer their employment issues. Also by preluding new computer - technological companies and bringing outsourcing work to them can be tremendously helpful for highly - educated unemployed citizens Outsourcing work will able to offer them attractive salary. Inventing specific computer technology, country would have edge over all other countries in the world. It would be considered powerful.

People do not like change ,yet that change only make difference as such government should not be demotivated to take any move to invest money for development of computer technology or avoid any better opportunities to purchase copacetic and helpful computer technology, as implicitly it is helping beings of their nations to meet way more than their basic requirements.

niesaysi 16 / 281  
Feb 15, 2014   #2
Globally technology- Global technology

Globally technology is ruling world by making tasks much easier and faster.

Global technology has been ruling world through inventions which make tasks much easier and faster.
Although technology has great impact in the development of many countries,
many people believes
can satisfy various basic needs

I discern that acceleration of computer technology can satisfy various basic need of the people as such government must invest money in developing or purchasing computer technology .

I discern that acceleration of computer technology can satisfy various basic needs of the people, so the government must have a goal supporting it and invest money for win win technological development.
Pahan 1 / 1824  
Feb 15, 2014   #3
Education is an investment that gives certain returns.
Education is an investment that generates great returns.

Use of computer technology will make education more prolific.

Use of computers in education enhances its quality.

Today many government colleges and schools are provided with the computer lab for the education which make the teaching process smoother and effective.

Tell how the schools can make use of them to better their education quality. That is the most important point in your argument. Then support this idea with a good example.
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 15, 2014   #4
First, I have a request for you - Have a meaningful title for your essay (When you open a new thread, you should type a meaningful title in the "Subject" block. This has been attended by us) That's a forum rule and it also helps you earn more feedbacks. :)

Your essays look pretty bulky and I doubt whether you were able to handle 30 min time for this :( Also, you need to pay attention to your essay structure. I saw Pahan has given a good suggestion in one of your threads. Hope you follow that :)
aldebaran 8 / 16  
Feb 16, 2014   #5
sandipsinh:
Thirdly, many countries of the world are trying to combat low - employment problem and impacted population of the countries are enable to satisfy their basic needs.


I would change to:
Thirdly, many countries are fighting against unemployment because people cannot satisfy their needs if they are out of work.

sandipsinh:
Inventing specific computer technology, country would have edge over all other countries in the world. It would be considered powerful.

I would change to:
Investing in computer technology would allow the country to reach ...
Cheers.


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