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IELTS TASK 2: GOVERNMENTS SHOULD BAN CIGARETTES AND OTHER TOBACCO PRODUCTS


ldlsky03 8 / 16 2  
Jul 13, 2013   #1
Smoking is a major cause of serious illness and death throughout the world today. In the
interest of the public heath, governments should ban cigarettes and other tobacco products.
Do you agree or disagree?


These days, the amount of ailments and death relate to smoking cigarettes or using other tobacco products have considered a serious problems. Thus, this raise certain concern as to whether the tobacco products are necessary to be prohibited to produce. Although, there are valid reasons to justify the contrary, it is my personal belief that those detrimental products should be banned for the sake of society. Analyzing both the consequents of tobacco products to individuals' health as well as social problems are as follow.

First of all, tobacco products has a negative impact on the field of health. This could be exemplified by a range of ailments namely lung cancer, high blood pressure and heart disease. Therefore, if the government prohibit this products, in long - term results, many people probably prevent from a variety of serious detriment in latter time. Thus, this make it clear that the authority are necessary to enforce the law about prohibiting tobacco for the healthy society in the future.

However, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of banning cigarettes and other tobacco products is that of behavioral society. This could be proven by the fact that people who addicted in smoking are likely to become drug abusers or even criminal. Hence, having forbid this detrimental products, the society are possible to prevent numerous societal habits and many social problems. From this it becomes quite evident that banning tobacco products is required for the development of cultural community.

By the way of conclusion, many ailments and death can be possible to decrease simply by banning tobacco. Thus, it is clear why the idea of forbidding cigarettes and other tobacco products can be supported for the positive impact on our community. After analyzing this subject, it is predicted that prohibiting tobacco will certainly be stronger than allowing those harmful products.

Thanks for reading it ^^.
jkjeremy - / 380 72  
Jul 13, 2013   #2
I've crossed out all the stuff that the reader already knows as well as the ideas you express more than once.

These days, the amount of ailments and death relate to smoking cigarettes or using other tobacco products have considered a serious problems. Thus, this raise certain concern as to whether the tobacco products are necessary to be prohibited to produce.Although, there are valid reasons to justify the contrary, it is my personal belief thatcigarettes and other tobacco products should be banned for the sake of society . Analyzing both the consequents of tobacco products to individuals' health as well as social problems are as follow.

First of all, tobacco products has a negative impact on the field of health. This could be exemplified by a range of ailments namely lung cancer, high blood pressure and heart disease. Therefore, if the government prohibit this products , in long - term results, many people probably prevent from a variety of serious detriment in latter time. Thus, this make it clear that the authority are necessary to enforce the law about prohibiting tobacco for the healthy society in the future.

However, perhaps the strongest argument in favor of banning cigarettes and other tobacco products is that of behavioral society. This could be proven by the fact that people who addicted in smoking are likely to become drug abusers or even criminal. Hence, having forbid this detrimental products , the society are possible to prevent numerous societal habits and many social problems. From this it becomes quite evident thatbanning tobacco products is required for the development of cultural community.

By the way of conclusion, many ailments and death can be possible to decrease simply by banning tobacco. Thus, it is clear why the idea of forbidding cigarettes and other tobacco products can be supported for the positive impact on our community.After analyzing this subject, it is predicted that prohibiting tobacco will certainly be stronger than allowing those harmful products.
ninaaxtopol 1 / 2 2  
Jul 13, 2013   #3
You shouldn't include your opinion in the introduction. Instead, try to develop the subject you are writing about, or in other words, rewrite the question in a different way.

Your body part of the essays should include both points of your opinion. Try as well to write short sentences until you reach certain confidence in writing.

The conclusion should consist your view or side of the argument.
If you follow this structure it will bring you up few points instantly.
ninaaxtopol 1 / 2 2  
Jul 13, 2013   #4
Addiction to smoking has been a serious problem for a while now. The causes of it could lead to several death related illnesses but people still cannot fight with the starvation for tobacco products.Many ways for helping people to stop smoking have been invented in recent years: electronic cigarettes, nicotine patches, chewing gums and etc. Yet, people still find it very hard to give up and one of the main reasons is that as long as tobacco products exist there will be a market for them. Therefore, it is common opinion that they should be banned by the government as a matter of the public health.

One of the main reasons for the existence of cancer is cigarettes. They destroy people's health slowly but constantly. Tiredness, headaches, stomach problems, they are all connected with smoking. The lung in our body is one of the major parts in it. Through breathing we energizes ourselves. Destroying our lungs while smoking is a slow but steady killing of every single cell we have.

The addiction to tobacco products is not only physical but psychological. Therefore, a ban should exist because, where adults could understand the consequences of smoking, young people start without any concern of the them. Until they start realizing how important is that, they are griped by the addictions as everybody else.

The mass production of tobacco products is industry that creates jobs but same time is so crucial for the health that the contribution of it is far smaller than the negative effects of it.

Therefore the ban should exist and the whole industry should be banned as a major contributor of the most serious illnesses in our century.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Jul 14, 2013   #5
You shouldn't include your opinion in the introduction.

I guess there is no harm in including your position in the introduction. It affirms which stance you take and helps the reader to follow your reasoning easily.

try to develop the subject you are writing about, or in other words, rewrite the question in a different way

Yes... this is important. Your first job is to introduce the prompt to the reader. So, you can get lots of help from the given prompt, but you should present it differently (don't copy it one to one). Then you can state your opinion.


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