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Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art.


marydan84 1 / -  
Sep 26, 2015   #1
In today's society a country with the heritage in the arts is considered to be culturally sophisticated and advanced. however due recent economic downfall and recession is many countries this type of lavish spending can an should be questioned. there is has been an ongoing debate for the longest time on how tax payers' money should be better utilized by governments. an important point to consider is the fact that art lovers are in the minority and thus spending money on art and sculptures would only benefit a few. when trying to utilize tax payers money governments should put great through in to how to utilize the funds is a manner which will benefit the majority.

Firstly I believe governments should not spend a lot a money on the arts are there are more publicly beneficial services and facilities those same monies can be utilized for. Even in richer countries there are villages that are in dire need of the basic necessities and could use an uplifting of the quality of their lives. by developing programs and helping the poorer people of a nation, the governments will be able to see a drastic reduction in the crime rates. Consequently there have been research carried out in the past which has put forward the correlation between marginal neighborhoods and crime rates which is positively skewed. With governments utilizing funds for the betterment of there neighborhoods, they are bound to see a favorable outcome In the future.

Secondly art lovers are in the minority. And when compared with sports lovers their significance is microscopic. You will always see more people at a football at a stadium than looking at arts and sculptures at an art museum. Commissioning or purchasing art would be an insult to tax payers who suffer severely from unemployment. That being said governments should invest in recreational facilities for the public, but the amount invested should be reduced.

In conclusion I believe governments should not invest too much money on art and should focus on providing services and recreational facilities which will benefit the majority.

irfan727 49 / 68 29  
Sep 26, 2015   #2
Hello mary, let me give some suggestions to your passage
i found mistakes, if you write after dot please use capital letter.
advanced. however due (it should be "advanced. However, due " ) also put comma after using word however in the first sentence.
be questioned. thereis has been an ongoing debate for the longest time
here also with the same issue, and what you mean with putting double to be on the red mark
be questioned. There was a progress debate for long time ...
benefit a few. when trying ... Please use capital.

In today's society a country with the heritage in the arts ...
this is better if u change it with
Nowadays, a country with the heritage in the arts ...

Firstly I believe governments ...
First, I believe governments

Even in richer countries there are villages ..
i recommend becoming like this :
Even in the developed states, there are villages ...

thanks, hopefully it can helps
Clare 3 / 3  
Sep 26, 2015   #3
However due recent economic downfall and recession many countries of this types of lavish spending should be questioned. There has been an ongoing debate for the long time on how tax payers' money should be better utilized by governments.

Firstly I believe governments should not spend a lot a money on the arts because there are more public beneficial services and facilities which same amount of money can be utilized for.

These are my suggestions. I think some sentences' structures are wrong
echo5016 4 / 6  
Sep 26, 2015   #4
however due to recent economic downfall and recession,is many countries think this type of lavish spending can an should be questioned. tThere is has been anongoingcontentious/perennial debate for the longest time on how tax payers' money should be better utilized by governments.

p.s. I don't know which one is better: "utilize" or simply "use".


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