The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011

Reading statistics - 3 years period

The line graph illustrates how many books people read at Burnaby Public Library over 3 years from 2011 to 2014.

Overall, it is clear that the number of books, that people read at Burnaby Public Library, generally increased from 2011 to 2013 before being different trends for men and women in the following 2 years. While the proportion of books read by men rise dramatically, that of books the women is a steady fall.

From 2011 to 2013, there was a slight growth from around 3000 books to just under 4000 books in the number of books which men read before going up significantly to approximately 10000 books in 2013. Similarly, that of books which women read witnessed a gradual climb from around 5000 books and reached a high of 10000 books in 2013.

In 2014, there was a steady surge to over 14000 books in the numbers of books read by men. This was the highest figure in the period. In contrast, women read books that had downward trends from 10000 books in 2013 to around 8000 books.

Thank you in advance to help improve my writing skill.

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  Thank you in advance to help improve my writing skill
  

@huynhtien2407
Create more concise sentences. Structure is crucial when you are writing - remember this. Ensure that your structure is consistent - and that it uses appropriate terminologies to create detail. Additionally, it is also crucial that you would omit words that are unnecessary to building your content. Remember that to ensure that your technical angle in writing is well-assured, you should be able to use techniques to trim down your writing.

In addition, always make sure that you follow formal/academic writing standards when you are interpreting said information.

Let's revise a few portions of your essay in accordance.

The line graph illustrates the number of books read at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

Overall, it is clear that within the three-year period the number of books read has increased. While the proportion of books read by men has risen, the number for women has steadily fallen.

From 2011 to 2011, there was a slight growth in the number of books men read from 3000 to approximately 4000. This then significantly rose to 10 000 books in 2013. [...]

Try to not overwhelm your paragraphs with information as you go along. Trying to separate and categorize your data into specific portions would go a long way.

Best of luck!

Thanks Maria. You will fix my essay. <3 <3

Have a nice day.