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(IELTS graph)Yearly percentage of home schooling in Some country during six years



christyj 5 / 15  
Mar 3, 2013   #1
You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task.
The table below describes percentages of home schooled students in SomeCountry in 1999-2004.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown.

The given bar chart describes the yearly percentage of home schooling in Some country during six years period from 1999 to 2004 in kindergarten, grade 1-2, grade 3-4, grade 5-6 and grade 7-8.

Overall, all grades showed an increasing percentage under the years of review, except grade 1-2 in 2000 and grade 5-6 in 2000 and 2001. There was a regular increase of .1% in kindergarten until 2001 and the stayed the same for next one year then ended with 2.9 in 2004. In grade1-2 the net increase in the percentage was .6% after 5 yrs. It rised from 1.5% to 2.1%. Though it dripped in 2000, it regained its popularity and increased thereafter. In grade 3-4 a regular gradual increase of .1% in all year except 2003, .3%. The total increase in percentage was .6%.

Grade 5-6 the percentage of growth showed an irregular trend. In 2000, it declined by .2% the next year, increase .1% and remained the same level followed by .3% in the following two years .5% in 2003 and 2004. The total rise in percentage is 1.1%. Grade 7-8 stayed same until 2001 in 1.6%, the next year doubled in 2003, increased by .2% and .1% in 2003 and 2004 respectively. The net percentage was .9%.

In brief, the trend of home schooling is gaining ground in Some country. Grade 5-6 showed the highest percentage of increase and kindergarten was the minimum in the six years under review.


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mhss 18 / 53  
Mar 3, 2013   #2
Hi,
1. The introduction can be altered as,

The given bar chart describes the percentage of home schooling in a country over a period of six years from 1999 to 2004, in particular, kindergarten, grade 1-2, grade 3-4, grade 5-6 and grade 7-8.

.. It rised from 1.5% to 2.1%. BEFORE BEING dripped in 2000,AFTER WHICH it regained its popularity and CONTINUED TO INCREASE.

...FIGURES FOR grade 5-6 showed an irregular trend...

2. Your conclusion is really nice.

mhss.


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