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Being happy with a job is more important than having a high salary?



123nnt 4 / 11  
Jun 23, 2011   #1
(I'm going to take the TOEFL iBTŽ test this July, so please help me with my writings. Thanks in advance !!!)

Everyone wants to have a dream job. Many people prefer employment with high salary, while others consider whether they like the jobs or not. If I have to choose between the career with high wages and the one I am happy with, I will choose the latter.

One factor that affects the efficiency of work is the attitude of the employee towards his job. If he loves his career, he will work very hard. If he hates it, there will be a tremendous decrease in efficiency. Even with high salaries, many people refuse to continue their jobs because they feel that they do not fit with what they are doing or the working environment cannot bring them creativity.

An enthusiastic worker is likely to remain in his position for a long time. Therefore, he will collect precious experience and easily get promoted. Being happy with your job motivates you to stay longer with the company and set goals to achieve. On the other hand, if you have to do boring tasks or make risky decisions at work, it is impossible for you to find motivation to further your career.

When you have the job you love, you do not want to jump to another company. This stability enables you to start your future plans. For example, after getting a good employment, you think of saving money to buy a house and build a small family. People who are dissatisfied with their jobs cannot focus on preparing for their future. The first thing they would do is to change their job until they are happy with it.

Well-paid occupations often go with pressure. Pressure can be a minor problem if you find inspiration and motivation in your job. Thus, being contented with what you are doing is always more important than getting a high wage.

EF_Susan - / 2310  
Jun 23, 2011   #2
Everyone wants to have their dream job.

Many people prefer employment with a high salary, while others consider whether they like the jobs or not.

One factor that affects the efficiency of work is the attitude of the employee towards his job.---Very good point!

Even with high salaries, many people refuse to continue their jobs because they feel that they do not fit with what they are doing or that there is no room for creativity.

Therefore, he will gain precious experience and easily get promoted.

Being happy with your job motivates you to stay longer with the company and have set goals to achieve.

When you have a job you love, you do not want to jump to another company.

Well-paid occupations often come with a lot of pressure.

I agree with you!! Good luck in school and have fun!

:)
OP 123nnt 4 / 11  
Jun 23, 2011   #3
Thanks a lot for helping me :D
Is my language ok? I think my writing is simple and reasons are not very effective.
bronzeB - / 3  
Jun 24, 2011   #4
A high salary can be lost and you spend the money easily. But if you're happy with your job, you'll enjoy your work and the lessons you learned and the memories you have with your co-employees can be treasured and precious.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jun 25, 2011   #5
If he hates it, there will be a tremendous decrease in efficiency.

Good point!

my writing is simple and reasons are not very effective.

No, simplicity is powerful! Simplicity is effective. It's okay...

No need for "a" here:
For example, after getting a good employment, you think of saving money to buy a house and build a small family. ------Yes, I suppose that is what we humans do! Strange creatures, aren't we...
ajit88rai 22 / 186  
Jun 25, 2011   #6
Hi buddy, for this particular essay , I would suggest u to read the following theories:
-scientific management by F.W.Taylor
- Abraham Maslow's need hierarchy theory
- Herzberg's two factor theory
if u read these theories- i mean their outlines only- u will b able to write more specifically n technically about what an individual wants in his life- n. u should know that for an individual- financial security is one of the prior needs while self-actualisation is the last need according to Abraham Maslow..

-try n co-relate with these ppl n their concepts- ur essay will look ultimate then...

i hope it helps u my friend

Quote for u:

"If you don't makes mistakes, you aren't really trying."
-Coleman Hawking
OP 123nnt 4 / 11  
Jun 26, 2011   #7
Thanks you guys a lot :D

No, simplicity is powerful! Simplicity is effective. It's okay...

"If you don't makes mistakes, you aren't really trying."

I will remember these :D

I think this forum should add a "Thank" button; otherwise, members will need to post a message to say "thank you"


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