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A healthy person: What do people do to stay healthy in your country?



plotophyte 4 / 6  
Feb 25, 2010   #1
A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet gets a lot of exercise and avoids stress.
What do people do to stay healthy in your country?
Thesis statement: Every person should take care of his health.

Like in other countries, healthy life style and having healthy society is one of the main priorities of the country where I live now.
Fortunately, most of the people are born healthy but the main task is to be able to take care of the health which we have gained by the nature.

In the country where I live now people are having healthcare activities and they are being taught beginning from young age in order to have habits of healthcare. Sports activities are widely used in schools. Children in early age learn to do exercises and having fun playing team games like football, volleyball. It also helps them in future to avoid harmful habits like smoking, alcohols and weak nutrition. Physical education is also inseparable part of university studying program.

For adult people we have suitable jogging places and many stadiums. There are also a lot of swimming pools for people who do not like jogging. And they widely use these priorities for their health care ambitions.

Another part of healthcare process is to have good healthy food and diet. People have access to a wide system of information by the means of internet, TV, magazine where they easily find a lot of useful articles about the diet and healthcare. Most of the people also prefer food and products which are cultivated in more natural condition and look healthy.

Everybody here at least is willing to have pretty a good rest at the weekends spending time with family and friends it seems to help avoid stress after hard working week.

For conclusion, I would say that every person is free to choose his life style whether to be health or not but like in other countries in the country where I live now it is clearly defined that supporting people in healthcare education and means leads only for social benefits and only healthy people can create health and strong community.

I am very thankful in advance! please post your comments.

Rod_Farva 5 / 18  
Feb 25, 2010   #2
Like in other countries, a healthy life style and having a healthy society is one of the main prioritiesofin the country where I live now.

Fortunately, most of the people are born healthy, but the main (perhaps substitute main with major) task (within our society) is to be able to take care of the health which we have gained by the nature.

That's all I really had time to edit right now. As for the argument, it is clear and makes sense, however, you need a little editing to polish up some subject-verb agreements and other grammatical matters. Good luck with your paper!


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