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High salaries to sportsmen or other important professions; equally hard work


rachana 2 / 2  
Feb 28, 2014   #1
Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justifies while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions. *39*

It is the fact that successful sports professionals earn lots of more money than people in other important professions. I strongly favor to the fact.

Yes, successful sports person earns lots of money than others but that money are the pay back of their hardcore work in the field of sports, dedication towards the game and having the feelings of sportsmanship. I think to become a successful sportsman both mental and physical balance is needed. Unlike doctors and engineers or other important professions becoming successful sports person is not just learnt from going to training schools rather it's an inbuilt talent that one should have and the dedication. For this the phrase rightly matched that Leaders are born not made.

There is no doubt that paying high salaries to sportsmen is controversial subject as becoming doctors and engineers or other important professions also equally needed hardwork and dedication. Also its due to those doctors and engineers sports men can have the knowledge of how much effort they can put in their body and it's entirely from engineers that sportsmen knew the exact facts and figure of measurement.

Nevertheless, Successful sportsmen not only become famous by their names also they are the pride for the nation. They play a vital role in economic boost up of country. For example Maradona is popular not just from his name but we also know he is from Australia. Sachin Tendulkar, Pele, David Beckham, Ronaldo, Michael Jordan and lots more are few examples.

Hence, I strongly believe that paying successful sportsperson high is totally justificable.

mariasultana 7 / 13  
Feb 28, 2014   #2
Introductory para is nor good.
You cannot use many other professions, it is necessary that mentions name or otherwise do not write.
SHanafi 120 / 415 93  
Feb 28, 2014   #3
hi, if you attach what this essay purposing such as for IELTS, TOEFL, GMAT or others, it will be better.

For this the phrase rightly matched that Leaders are born not made.

I am afraid that this expanded from your prompt. Overall, I suggest you to make a conclusion in the end of your essay, this is a common rule in writing essay. Hopefully this is helpful enough
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 14, 2014   #4
There are two things you need to follow when opening a new thread. First, you should have a meaningful title in the Subject field (this one is attended by us). Second, you better mention the purpose of this writing in the title itself, e.g. TOEFL, IELTS, GRE etc. That help others to provide you with more task related comments.

It is the fact that successful sports professionals earn lots of more money than people in other important professions. I strongly favor to the fact.

I think it is better if your introduction is a bit more longer :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Mar 14, 2014   #5
Hence, I strongly believe that paying successful sportsperson high is totally justificable.

This is very simple. I am not sure you will earn a good score for this. Remember, a clear and precise point of view also comes from a good concluding paragraph.


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