Holding an international sporting events benefits a country, or has negative consequences?

[Writing task 2] Sports Events

Some people think that hosting international sports events is good for the country, while some people think it is bad. Discuss both views and state your opinion

Along with the advancement of the globe and globalization, an increasing number of events are being held in various regions of the world to help link countries, including sports competitions, and it causes a lot of conflict views. Some individuals believe that holding international sporting events benefits a country, while others believe that it has negative consequences. In my opinion, I suppose that organizing international athletic events would have a greater beneficial impact than the negative impact.

On the one hand, there are a number of reasons why many residents think that hosting an international sporting event is detrimental. Firstly, there will be large gatherings of people, which make governments have difficulties in controlling the crowd. Several crimes may be readily perpetrated because few people will notice, such as robbers stealing fans' belongings or other frauds if supporters do not pay attention. Furthermore, the brawls might have occurred amongst too enthusiastic supporters. Secondly, arranging a huge sports festival may cost a big amount of money, which can put a strain on a country's budget.

On the other hand, despite the potential drawbacks, the host country might reap certain benefits. To begin with, it will boost tourism. The large number of sports fans will allow the country to benefit from the costs of motels, hotels, and other expenses incurred by the supporters during their visit to the host country. The host country also has the chance to promote the country's image across the globe, which not only helps it attract a big number of foreign tourists, but also helps it strengthen its international dignity. Moreover, the fact that a country hosts international events attracts a significant number of local audiences, whether or not they are sports enthusiasts, which will influence many people's thinking, increasing their love and pride for their homeland while also stimulating their enthusiasm for sports.

In conclusion, I believe that organizing international sports will bring more benefits than harm to a country.

This statement is not necessary in the prompt restatement section. Based on the original prompt, the paraphrasing should not cover more than 2 sentences, with an extra sentence thrown in to respond to the "state your opinion" part. That makes a total of 3 sentences only. You do not need an overworked introduction that accidentally begins to discuss an opinion or offers an insight that is not part of the original presentation. It ruins the task accuracy of the restatement + opinion paragraph. Stick to the original at all times to avoid any TA reductions.


This is a phrase that depicts uncertainty in your response. It indicates that you are not really sure of what your opinion is. This will result in a lower TA score because you do not have a clear opinion represented in the required section. Your opinion must always be presented from a position of strength, certainty, and clarity of thought. Otherwise, this will be another TA score deduction.


And? What else? Build on this explanation to tie in with your first reason. Since the two reasons are unrelated, this second reason is under developed and will reduce the cohesiveness and coherence score of this paragraph. When you see that you cannot fully explain a second reason, it is best not to do it. Do not force deductions from your score when it can easily be avoided by ommitting non-helpful presentations such as a little developed second reason in the same paragraph.


While you managed to represent the general audience opinion in the previous paragraph, you forgot to represent the same in this part which represents the other public opinion. The discussion would have been better if it had used the correct 3rd person group pronouns for the presentation. That way, the reader would not be confused and accidentally think that you are presenting a personal opinion already. If the examiner takes this discussion from your personal point of view, then this paragraph will have failed to represent the correct discussion format. That would be another score deduction, which would not bode well for your essay since there are already several deductions being applied to it.


You cannot place your little developed personal reason in the conclusion as a single sentence. The discuss both views and give an opinion prompt is more often than not presented as a 3 paragraph essay. Your personal opinion needing to be completely developed over 5 sentences in the same vein as the public opinion discussion presentation. The conclusion should summarize the preceding discussion in a manner similar to the prompt restatement+personal opinion paragraph. This time though, it represents the prompt restatement + comparative discussions. It will have 3-4 sentences at the most. 5 sentences if you actually try to stretch the summary.

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