Writing task 1: household car ownership in Braitain from 1971 to 2007

An average British family and number of cars

The line graph illustrious the proportion of car possessed by British household over the period from 1971 to 2007.
It is clear that the figure on all three sides varied consistently. The number of families owned one car and two or more cars were prefer. Meanwhile, the opposite was true for that of no car.

At the beginning of the period, majority of residents tended to favourite other transports without car which stood at over 50%. In 2005, the figures for one car ownership peaked at around 55%, while that of no car experienced a dramatical decrease to 35%.At the same time, the percentage of two or more cars fluctuated steadily about 15%.

In 2015, there was a significant deline of over 23% in the proportion one car. The opposite parttern can be seen two or more car ownership. From 2015 onwards, the trending of not using using car of households went down considerably at stood at 15%, compared to that of one car and two or more cars possession were close behind at roughly 40% at the end of the period.

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Lexical resource error. Consider the word meaning difference between illustrious and illustrates :

Illustrious - highly distinguished; renowned; famous
Illustrates - to furnish (a book, magazine, etc.) with drawings, pictures, or other artwork intended for explanation, elucidation, or adornment.

As you can see, you had a word choice error that would impact your vocabulary score. Since you are an ESL user, your dictionary should be your best friend. Always look up the word meaning while you can to be sure you are using the correct refence. Build your vocabulary now while you are practicing because these costly errors will affect your final score.


Sentence clarity problem. Your sentence structures become incorrect due to your lack of vocabulary proficiency. These are errors that should be addressed by your English language teacher through sentence building exercises. In this case it is the usage of the word "preferred" that caused the mistake.

you should be more careful to not have some critical mistake like ''illustrious''
''The number of families owned one car and two or more cars were prefer '' if you mean this is subject, then it should be ''owning'', but in this case this sentence was wrong. I think the way you analyse the graph quite good, but you have a problem with your grammar.

@ho chu diem my
You should replace "illustrious" with "illustrates" or "shows"
"The number of families owned one car and two or more cars were prefer." I think there are problems with this sentence. The meaning is not clear, you should replace "owned" with "owning" and replace "were prefer" with "increased" or "showed an upward trend", for example.

"majority of residents tended to favourite ...". This sentence is not clear, too. You have problems with grammar.

"the figures for one car ownership ...". Replacing "the figures" with "the figure" or "figures for"
All in all, you are quite good at analyzing the graph, but your biggest problem is grammar and vocabulary.