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Task 2: The idea of whether or not to accept the social convention of a host country


hienpham123456 1 / -  
Dec 2, 2021   #1
Topic:
People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?



The idea of whether or not to accept the social convention of a host country remains a source of controversy. From my perspective, I am an attribute to this point of view.

The case for adapting to the social behaviour in a new nation can be made by pointing to the fact that it can facilitate the business of a foreigner. The explanation for this is that local people have an inclination to know whether or not foreigners respect their country or not. When expatriates follow the traditions, it will create a harmony between the newcomers and people who currently live there. As a result, it is easier to do business with them as they already have a good impression on their partners.

Another key component of the case for following the norms of the host country is that it is easier to make more friends. It is beyond a doubt that newcomers would gain more respect from local people if they show respect to the customs of a country. This behaviour will render them more likeable and more sociable in native people's view. For this reason, the chance to make more friends might ascend higher.

A final consideration in refuting the acceptance of the local customs and traditions is the fact that it might be a nuisance sometimes. It is vital to understand that norms in this country might be considered offensive in another country. Japan is a valuable example in this regard, as there is a steretype about people who eat outdoor. They will be considered rude or impolite, which is annoying for those who are Westerners.

Thus it can be seen that following the social norms when living in a host country can helps foreigners to open their circles of friends as well as working more easily. Therefore, I agree with the stand of the writer on this opinion.
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Dec 2, 2021   #2
You have the wrong idea about the discussion focus of this essay. It is not discussing "tourism" or "work residence" in relation to customs and traditions of a stranger in a new country. Rather, this speaks of immigration status people who will be permanently exposed to their new country's customs and traditions. Your restatement is inaccurate in specific aspects. As for your opinion, you did not express it within the required parameters. There is no "degree" of support or non-support for the given discussion. I am afraid your task response will not be well scored because of these problems.

Learn when a 5 paragraph essay is required and, when a 4 paragraph essay is sufficient. Your current presentation is a 4 paragraph statement requirement. It only needs 2 reasoning paragraphs. Over discussing is just as bad as under discussing as it forces more accidental errors in your writing and tends to result in an incomplete presentation during the actual testing process. The reasons you provided are valid though and quite good. Just, do not overdo it because of the potential for more scoring deductions in the end.
nhidinh1231 4 / 7 2  
Dec 2, 2021   #3
It is great since I have found a set of synonyms in your essay. You are good at word choice.

I also found some errors in your essay. Hope that it could help you

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more likeable

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can helps foreigners to open

an inclination to know whether or not foreigners...


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