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IELTS_cultural traditions will be destroyed by developing tourism. right/wrong?


Ibrahim_Xian 6 / 9 6  
Aug 15, 2013   #1
topic :Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. others, however, believe that is the only way to asve these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

How to preserve cultural traditions has become a heated topic throughout the world. Some people believe we should boost tourism, while others against it. It is my personal belief that utilizing the specialty of a country's culture to develop its tourism meanwhile helping saving the country's old traditions is a good approach. However, it is not the only method.

Some people tend to think that using cultural traditions for tourism purpose would destroy their cultural identity. The main reason might be that they are worrying about the culture assimilation from other cultures that bring by tourists. Specifically, local people will tend to change their traditions to cater the majority tourists' expectation. For example, it is common to see branches of KFC, McDonald, Starbucks in any tourist attractions around the world.

On the other side of the debate, many argue that tourism is the only way in which help to save cultural traditions. That is because the current trend of globalization that has prompted culture assimilation becoming transnational. Therefore, in order to be sustainable, countries must learn to propagate their culture to the world. Perhaps, one of the most effective ways of doing this would be to promote tourism. Taking Thailand for example, since this country embraced a tourist industry revolution, I have witnessed a phenomenal amount of Thailand restaurants in my hometown, which I never heard of just 5 years ago. Clearly, tourism does have the potential to thriving a country's traditions.

As far as I am concerned, cultural assimilation is inevitable. The only way to reduce the likelihood of being assimilated is to propagate a country's own culture instead of hiding it. In addition to developing tourism, solutions such as giving financial incentives to local film industry, organizing cultural activities in communities can also give saving cultural traditions a helping hand.
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Aug 15, 2013   #2
Some people believe we should boost tourism, while others against it

... you need to talk about the real issue as indicated in the prompt. It says that some hold the view that cultural traditions would be destroyed when they are used for money making attractions to the the tourists.
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Aug 16, 2013   #3
:Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists

Interesting topic :)

Ibrahim_Xian:
Some people believe we should boost tourism, while others against it... you need to talk about the real issue as indicated in the prompt. It says that some hold the view that cultural traditions would be destroyed when they are used for money making attractions to the the tourists.

Well.... this is my suggestion for your introduction;
Cultural traditions are an important aspect for any nation because they help a nation to keep its people together while allowing them to get connected with their past. On the other hand, tourism is also an important economic activity that helps boost a country's economy. However, there are two different views about using cultural traditions to help boost tourism. Some believe it would destroy the value of such traditions while some others claim it is the only way to preserve them for future generations. I support the former opinion.
me4mbd 5 / 11 5  
Aug 18, 2013   #4
The main reason might be that they are worrying about the culture assimilation from other cultures that bring by tourists.

That is because the current trend of globalization that has prompted culture assimilation becoming transnational.

s far as I am concerned, cultural assimilation is inevitable. The only way to reduce the likelihood of being assimilated is to propagate a country's own culture instead of hiding it.

In several places you repeated the phrase "cultural assimilation" or the word " assimilation" , which look odd. I think it should be better if you replace by other synonyms i.e cultural acclimation, cultural ingestion and so on.

Taking Thailand for example, since this country embraced a tourist industry revolution, I have witnessed a phenomenal amount of Thailand restaurants in my hometown, which I never heard of just 5 years ago.

I think Thai restaurant would be the right phrase instead of Thailand restaurant as like as Chinese restaurant instead of China restaurant .


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