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Imposing heavier punishments on dangerous drivers is the solely way to secure traffic


Chuminh 1 / 1  
Jan 9, 2019   #1

The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses.


Do you agree or disagree?


Many people think that imposing heavier punishments on dangerous drivers is the solely way to secure traffic calming more effectively. From my personal perspective, this solution associated with other measures should be adopted together to promote better driving habits.

On the one hand, strict punishments can absolutely prevent road users from driving recklessly. Some of these penalties towards traffic violators can be driving ban, license suspension or even more seriously, imprisonment. The purpose of those punishments mainly is to show reckless drivers that their actions are highly causing fatal consequences on the lives of the others. Besides, better law enforcement also helps to ensure the zero chance that those drivers will repeat their mistakes the second time.

On the other hand, I believe that safe driving can be encouraged in several different ways that would be soft on drivers and without punishing them. One of the ways is frequently give random breath tests in order to early spot drunk drivers. Moreover, speeding cameras should be installed to deter people from driving too fast. Finally, authorities and local councils can reduce road crashes by organizing more educational programs, especially for juveniles and young drivers, to attract more public participation, which helps them become more alert when it comes to traffic rules and regulations.

In conclusion, although it seems to be effective to implement such harsh punishments on driving offenses , I agree that there are additionally substitute methods to mitigate the rates of accidents.
Holt - / 7,651 1998  
Jan 10, 2019   #2
Minh, as this is not a cause and solution essay, your response to the given prompt is incorrect. This is an agree or disagree, single personal opinion defense paper. Therefore, your prompt response should have been somewhat as follows:

Original Prompt: Do you agree or disagree?
Your Response: From my personal perspective, this solution associated with other measures should be adopted together to promote better driving habits.
Correct Response: I agree disagree that an improvement in road violation penalties is the only method to better road safety for a few reasons.


The reason that instruct my students to place their response at the opening paraphrase is simple. The question is being asked in the original prompt, which means the response should be a part of the prompt paraphrase. In this case, a simple reference to the disagreement with the statement at the start will also help the student outline the discussion for his upcoming paragraphs.

This is a single opinion essay and as such, should use 2-3 reasoning paragraphs to support your opinion. It is not a comparative opinion essay since you are not required to discuss both points of view. Unless otherwise specified, all Task 2 essays must be discussed from a single point of view. The concluding paragraph is always presented as a summary of the body of paragraphs and prompt statement. That is the main reason why you cannot present your response to the prompt question in the last paragraph. You need to close the paragraph, not continue the discussion. Remember, you cannot go over 5 paragraphs for the Task 2 presentation. When you do not summarize the last paragraph, you create an open ended essay, which will reflect badly on your TA score.
OP Chuminh 1 / 1  
Jan 11, 2019   #3
Thanks for your big help :)



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