They can contribute to their work for longer days, creating more assets for their families and adding more values to the society.
For instance, professionals like doctors become more skilled with the experiences they gain over time and apart from their own families, the society also gets benefited
if they can serve for the longer time.
On the other hand, aging issue has some negative influences as well. Firstly, as long as senior citizens occupy current jobs, the younger cannot join them, thereby causing a tide of unemployment which may be harmful for the
stability of societysocial stability .
- Are you pretty sure about this fact? I mean, senior citizens will have to retire when they reach certain ages, right? If they are still in the position, maybe they are still of some value right?
As an example, the government has to spend more money on pension craft to raise the older people and this money is collected from the younger
society in the form of tax.
Besides from these minor mistakes, I think your essay is great! As for me I really love reading such essays with clear, well organized ideas, plentiful structures and adequate vocabulary. Keep up the good job :)