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IELTS: with increasing use of computers, letters writing will disappear


alexwater 3 / 2  
Apr 14, 2014   #1
With the increasing use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people write letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of letter writing will disappear. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The last few years have witnessed the increasing use of mobile phones and computers as a communication tool.Consequently,some people even think traditional letters are not significant any more,and will disappear in our life eventually. Personally, I do not agree with opinion.

Admittedly, as mobile phones and computers are becoming increasingly powerful and intelligent,they can provide many advantages in our communication.To start with,as long as they are connected to the internet, we can use our mobile phones or laptops to contact our friends and family members anywhere and at any time. Besides, compared with letters, using computers or smart phones to write and send emails is much faster. Emails can reach the recipients almost right after we click the mouse button,while it can take quite a few days for letters to be delivered. Additionally, latest development of information technology offers many powerful functions,making communication over internet more enjoyable and pleasant. Video chatting software,for instance,allows us to see each other while talking,enhancing the communication experience a great deal. Obviously, all these mentioned conveniences are not what traditional letters can provide.

Nevertheless, traditional letters still have important roles to play,although electronic devices are prevailing in people's daily contact. Firstly,due to businessmen's concern over security,paper letters will be used for important business exchange,such as the signing of business contract.Secondly,on some special occasions,it is more appropriate to use letters to express our emotions like love,respect and care. For example, our girlfriends must be more touched when they see our words in paper than when receiving our emails which can be written effortlessly with the help of computer software. In such case, our handwriting has special meanings for the recipients of our letters.

In conclusion, mobile phones and computers will continue to be main means of communication,because of their convenience and efficiency. However,I believe traditional skill of letter writing is still important, as traditional letters are preferable in some special occasions.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 15, 2014   #2
Personally, I do not agree with this opinion.

The last few years have witnessed the increasing use of mobile phones and computers as a communication tool.Consequently,some people even think traditional letters are not significant any more,and will disappear in our life eventually. Personally, I do not agree with opinion.

Good introduction. It contains the necessary parts - Hook, background of the issue and the thesis statement (your opinon)

Admittedly, as mobile phones and computers are becoming increasingly powerful and intelligent,they can provide many advantages into our ways of communication.
Well.... you expressed this opinion already in the introduction. In the body paras, start justifying your opinion. So, you should have started this para with the second sentence :)
OP alexwater 3 / 2  
Apr 16, 2014   #3
Thank you so much, dumi.

What score do you think I can get for this essay, in a real IELTS test ?
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,203 468  
Apr 20, 2014   #4
Firstly

Secondly

When you write firstly, secondly, lastly to mention supporting points , I am afraid that you are overusing the linking devices. I think the better way is to avoid using lots of the connective words. If you think that you need to earn coherence and cohesion, pay particular attention to demonstrate cohesion.

What score do you think I can get for this essay,

We can't give you definitive band scores. If we do, you will put a great deal of trust on us. If we do give you band scores that are not reflected in your eventual IELTS test results, you may well build up unrealistic expectations, and ultimately, disappointment for you. We focus on recommending ways how you can improve your different skills - that is a much more useful way to help you to improve your language ability and therefore, your test results. If you want to take IELTS exam as early as possible, please pay particular attention to grammar and whole points in the table of IELTS writing descriptors.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 21, 2014   #5
Thank you so much, dumi.
What score do you think I can get for this essay, in a real IELTS test ?

.... well, as eddies has mentioned, it is difficult for me too to give you a definite score for this. However, I see you have very good writing skills and you have a great potential for going for a very good band. Just follow the structural guidelines Pahan has provided and make sure your essay contains those features that would help you score good marks. Also, practice with time to have your time management skills enhanced :)


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