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Many individuals warn that the vanishing of various species is a major hurdle for humans


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Jul 5, 2021   #1
Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.



Unarguably, environmental deterioration is happening at a startling pace. Many individuals warn that the vanishing of various species is a major hurdle for humans, however, it is argued by others that mankind is facing more pressing issues. This essay is to elaborate on both viewpoints and express my own perspective.

To begin with, there is no denying that human's activities are taking their toll on different species in nature. Worldwide, myriads of animals are losing their habitats due to overexploitation or under severe threat caused by hunting, thus being pushed to the brink of extinction. A telling example is the elephants, who used to abound on the Earth, are now at serious stake as hunters continuously massacred them for their ivory. On top of that, the scarcity of plants is well-documented, since deforestation illegal logging and forest fire continue to pose a threat to forests and jungles that accommodate not only animals but millions of types of trees. The results of this depletion are manifold, including the loss of ecological biodiversity as well as important species that contribute to science and medicine.

Nevertheless, apart from this extinction issue, other environmental problems are all on the rise. First of all, major factors jeopardising humankind are global warming and ocean acidification, which are resulted from greenhouse gas emissions from industries. Not to mention, pollution is accelerating in cities, constituting a huge health hazard. To lesser or larger extent, these environmental dangers have detracted from people's quality of life and render government around the world anxious. Furthermore, it is apparent that natural calamities such as tsunamis, tornadoes or hurricanes, which will deal s lethal blow to areas or countries as occurring, are even worth worrying more about.

In conclusion, I believe that apart from the degradation of the Earth's flora and fauna, there multiple grave problems related to the environment that need dealing with. Therefore, it is high time natural conservation and environmental protection were prioritized.
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Jul 6, 2021   #2
Do not sensationalize the restated topic. To use a popular reference, that writers interpretation is fake news when compared to the original. The first sentence does not contain any information similar to the original statement. The second sentence contains some prompt references but misleads the reader as there is an incorrect reference to "major hurdles for humans" as opposed to the original "environmental problem" reference. The prompt topic restatement is a total alteration of the original presentation although the last part relates to the original requirements a bit. Only the second presentation is accurate . The writer does not a personal opinion at all even as the prompt requires such a representation upon interpretation presentation.

When a reference to "some people" and "others" is indicated this is a signal GRA scaring will include pronoun usage along with sentence formation, among others. It clearly indicates a comparative deliberation prior to a personal opinion presentation. The writer does not offer a complete picture of his sentence formation and grammar usage abilities due to these missing reference points.

The personal opinion is also presented as a conclusion , which creates an improper response format. That is the 3rd paragraph presentation. The essay does not have a proper conclusion presented. Overall, the response format is incorrect.


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