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Information technology overhauled people's life - wasting time and damaging people's health

irhame 52 / 50 25  
Nov 22, 2015   #1

Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities.

To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?


Information technology plays an equally important role for well-being. As such, it has overhauled our way of life in home, free and job activities' concept. While some believe that it brings some benefits such as instant access and enhancing work productivity, I argue that this causes more drawbacks like time-consuming and unhealthy lifestyle.

As a matter of fact, the advanced technology has boosted speed of the internet access. Today, the majority of people have so quick access to social and entertainment connections especially in networking site. A 2013 Tokyo University research recently reveals that Japan's speed in the internet's browsing at 16.34 Mb/s which is the second fastest access of the internet. As a consequence, people are more likely to use this internet for achieve some information easily. Therefore, the number of users will increased whilst the information technology advances day after day. Not only this, sophisticated devices of the technology have moved forward the quality of work thanks to a wide range of data which is saved in computer.

Despite these advantages, there are more counter-arguments for drawbacks for modern information technologies. Initially, the information technology has wasted users' time. While worker should read a lot of emails in their mailbox, children are liable to chat with their beloved friends for hours by using dialog online. What is more, unhealthy lifestyle cannot be avoided. The modern technology forced people to make sedentary activities. Clearly, even though every person works on screen, they will sit on the chair for long term which affect to their back healthy.

To conclude, the technology of information today is extremely essential for human being. On account of this, the human life has changed duo to advanced technology. Although many argue that it will increase the internet access and work capability, I totally believe that this is only wasting time and damaging people's health.
Jonyface 3 / 4 1  
Nov 22, 2015   #2
Sorry, I am new to these forums. Do you want this essay to be edited?

If so, this is what I thought.

The question asks you to identify how the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages. However, your essay explains the opposite.

Here is the rest of what I wanted to say
- 16.34 Mb/s today is very slow, you might want to update that stat.
-"Clearly, even thoughsince every person works onin front a screen, they willare required to sit on thea chair for long termperiods of time.which affectThis can lead to their back healthy.health issues, such as back pain. "
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Nov 23, 2015   #3
Irham, Jonathan is right. Your comprehension weakness has once again ruined your chances of passing this test. I have informed you more than once about your problem with understanding the prompt and you do not really show any signs of improvement in that aspect. It is really imperative at this point that you do your best to practice your comprehension skills. I will not even bother to review your essay for content and grammar because the whole discussion is going to the left when it should be going to the right. You did not respond to the prompt at all which means that in the actual test, you would have delivered an epic fail of a response, most likely failing the whole exam in the process.

Please, do yourself a favor and practice developing your comprehension skills. No, I do not believe that there is no time for a test-taker to develop and practice their weak points. If you want to pass your test, then you should acknowledge that you have inabilities that need to be addressed. Otherwise, you do not stand a chance of passing.

The exercise for comprehension skill development is really simple. It is as simple as reading an English comic book with a friend, then you can write an essay about what you understood the story to be about and then have your friend, who read the same comic book, check your essay for comprehension. If you were able to tell the correct story in your own words, in English (regardless of the imperfect grammar), then you will have begun to develop your comprehension skills. It is really of the utmost importance to your exam that you get your comprehension skills perfected. I wish for you to pass this test which is why I am being this hard on you. If you don't develop your comprehension skills, I can't help but fear what the actual test results for you might be.

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