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The information about the United States of America dwellers consuming energy by fuel


ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Apr 6, 2016   #1
A breakdown of the information about the United States of America dwellers in consuming energy by fuel in quadrillion units from 1980 to 2030 is depicted in the line graph. Overall, the most obvious pieces of information are that, despite some fluctuations, Petrol and Oil fuel is the highest fuel amidst all other fuels, which then the market trend showed the gradual growth of all fuels over a 26-year period. It is also estimated that in the next 14 years the consumption will be rise gradually.

To begin with, the largest starting point was petrol and oil at roughly 35 units in 1980, while natural gas and coal started at approximately 20 and 15 quadrillion units respectively. Nuclear, Solar/Wind, and Hydropower stood at the same point, at approximately 3 quadrillion units. Then, Coal, Nuclear, Solar/Wind, and Hydropower showed a gradual growth since the beginning until 1990, whereas natural gas, and petrol and oil indicated a dramatic drop.

With regards to the future estimation for the fuels, Nuclear, Solar/Wind, and Hydropower will remain unchanged in the next 14 years, while the rest will witness a gradual growth. Petrol and oil, natural gas, and coal are going to increase moderately until the end of the period. In the end of the period, petrol and oil is going to reach its peak, at nearly 50 quadrillion units.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Apr 6, 2016   #2
Hi Mochtar, I have read and crossed check your analysis to the graph provided and in conclusion, I can say that you were able to analyze the data and provide accurate information to your readers.

However, there are a few sentences that I would like to correct, please find below;

- the United States of American dwellers
- obvious piecesfacts of information
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- gas, and petrol and oil indicated a dramatic drop.

- for the fuels , Nuclear,
- unchangedconstant in the
- InBy the end of the period,

That's it from my end Mochtar, I hope I was able to share some valuable enhancements to your essay and for future writing reference, refrain from using a comma when your word is followed by the "and", the word "and " denotes the end of your examples or addition to your ideas, however, if you still have more notes following the last one, the the word "and", will not be necessary.


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