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International Aid - yes or no?



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Oct 13, 2025   #1
Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while others argue that the aid money is misspent by the governments that receive it, so international aid should not be given to the poor countries in the world. Discuss the two views of international aid and give your opinion.

In recent years, there has been a controversial argument that some people claim countries have responsibilities in supporting each other, while others believe that worldwide subsidized money ought not to be given to undeveloped countries for their government's misspending. This essay aims at discussing both these sides before presenting my opinion.
On the one hand, there are a great deal of advantages resulting from moral assertion among areas around the world. Mutual support is the main key to help poor countries develop because subsidized money from the others help them to innovate their infrastructure and develop their economy. Moreover, their living conditions will be improved by international aid and more social innovation policies will be implemented to enhance the living environment. However, if the undeveloped areas receive too much support, some of them tend to be independent and rely totally on the assertion of other countries. Not talking about certain responsible governments, it is evident that there are still lots of low autonomy governments who can easily be manipulated by negative pleasure. Therefore, giving money to them may cause serious results.
On the other hand, if there was any mutual support among the global community, it would exacerbate the rich-poor gap. This stems from the fact that many countries face massive challenges to develop by themselves. Furthermore, a developed country needs talented authorities and training a person to be brilliant which is very difficult and requires high-quality education systems. Therefore, after all of that happens, the undeveloped area will deal with significant obstacles to innovate successfully increasing the rich-poor gap and create potential risk of conflict and disrespection.
In my own opinion, I believe that we ought to go on supporting other countries and remaining international aid. Simultaneously, we also have to establish strict regulations in utilizing aid to prevent misspending. Moreover we can implement other practical solutions such as executing volunteer organisations coming to those countries to help people here revive or provide them with provisions instead of money.
In conclusion, mutual asserting has significant positive impacts on our development and relationship. Therefore, I personally think that we should continue supporting each other by international aid or volunteering activities and implement strict regulation to avoid misspending by the governments.
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Oct 14, 2025   #2
You have over discussed the essay at 370 words. If you end up with an open ended essay during the actual test, meaning you ran out of time to provide a completed discussion before time ran out, then you will receive an automatic failing score. Keep the discussion to 300 words and make sure your thought process is clear and concise in each of the 2 body paragraphs.

Do not exaggerate your statements such as
there has been a controversial argument
since such a reference is not being made in the original prompt. Provide only a calm and logical restatement of the facts to avoid these score reducing errors.

his essay aims at discussing both these sides before presenting my opinion.

Your TA score will be further reduced due to your lack of a proper thesis statement in the presentation. You must cite your support for one of the two opinions provided. Failure to do so will mean that you did not provide the contents of the introduction paragraph as expected. The TA score will receive additional deductions.

I personally think

There are 2 problems with this paragraph:

1. You cannot refer to your personal opinion in the concluding paragraph. That section is meant to only provide a reverse paraphrase of the writer's discussion.
2. You should not say "I think" because this will contradict your support for a given statement, aside from the discussion being placed in the wrong section of the opinion paper.

You are expected to provide an opinion for the pro and con public opinions. Provide heavy support for the opinion you agree with Use first and second person pronouns in the discussion paragraphs so that there will be a clarity regarding who is speaking. The lack of pronoun usage will affect your final C+C and GRA scores.
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Oct 14, 2025   #3
Sounds a good essay, however you have not adhered to simple structure, thesis statement - important (what you have written appears like purpose statement). Such brief and short papers requires simple structure, say think about a nice thesis statement, topic sentences for every paragraph, evidences within the paragraph, and a concluding statement. Also, write at least 3 sentences/paragraph.


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