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IELTS ESSAY, International law will not reduce crime rate in different countries



devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 8, 2013   #1
IELTS TASK2 ESSAY
Crime is nearly always related to the environment in which it occurs. For this reason, international laws and international law courts are unrealistic and will not succeed in reducing crime levels in different countries. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Answer:
It is highly debatable that international law and courts are ineffective to diminish offence rate around the nations. Both laws are necessary to tackle the felony and slash its growth.

In some cases international law is necessary people who are illegally exporting rare animal species and skins to other countries. Moreover, children are kidnapped and sold them as slave or for prostitution from across the continent. In addition, drug smuggling from all over globe in which most people mind and body are affected result in death. Terrorist attacks across the world which affects global economy and wealth. cyber crime like hacking, phishing, Pornography, threatening email, assuming someone's identity, defamation, SPAM, etc. global court should take harsh action against these convicts through international laws.

On the other hand, crime mostly related to particular location. For example, robbery, rape, child labour and molestation in particular place should be taken care by the local government. Nowadays, baby stealing from hospital is increased. Furthermore, sexual harassment against women and children should be handled by local law.

To conclude, by anlaysing both the views, depends on the crime, its environment and its links to other part of the world either domestic strict law or international severe law should act on the offenders. Let's hope for the crime free world in the future.

Comments:
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dumi 1 / 6793  
Jan 8, 2013   #2
It is highly debatable that international law and courts are ineffective to diminish offence rate around the nations.

"crime rate" is the better usage. :)

In some cases international law is necessary people who are illegally exporting rare animal species and skins to other countries.

... this has some grammar issues;
International laws play a significant role in controlling illegal international activities such as drug traffiking, human smuggling etc.

Moreover, children are kidnapped and sold them as slave or for prostitution from across the continent

This is what you mean by human smuggling :)
OP devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 8, 2013   #3
thanks dumi,

In some cases, international law is necessary to handle international crimes, Some people who are illegally exporting rare animal species and skins to other countries.

Is this sentence is ok
joythblessy 86 / 266  
Jan 8, 2013   #4
hai...

I feel it will be better if ..

...International law is a necessity..
For instance, some people..

Good attempt..
Keep it up
Tessy
OP devabe2005 46 / 96  
Jan 8, 2013   #5
thanks Tessy for your feedback


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