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[TOEFL essay] Internship prepare students better for their careers



eragon26050 1 / -  
Jul 8, 2014   #1
A university education should include an internship or some type of work experience.

An professional job mostly begins with an university education. The university teaches us the most important knowledge for the future job. However, beside the knowledge taught from the book, I think the university should add an internship or some working activity in their training because of some reasons. [..]

ivyaspirer 3 / 4  
Jul 10, 2014   #2
An professional job mostly begins with an university education. The university teaches us the most importantfundamental knowledge for the future job. However, beside the knowledge taught from the bookknowledge aside , I think the universityuniversities should add an internship or some working activity in their training because of somefor several reasons.

Firstly, students will have more chances to apply what they have just learned to the real life when doing internship in education program. The theory is only valuable when applied, and applying theory is not an easy skill. Therefore, when the students work whenwhile they are studying, they can practice application skill, and makemaking the theory is useful. It also help they know the purpose ofgives them a sense of purpose in what they are learning and interested in itsfosters their interest . Moreover, when applying, the knowledge will be remembered longer.knowledge can be retained for much longer.
Secondly, real life is too differentcan be vastly different from what it wasis taught in books . WhileThe books teach about the equation, theory, laws..., but in life,the most important is experienceexperience is what matters in life . Hence, working whenwhile studying helps students get some working experience. It will help them have more completely knowledge - including experienceIt will equip them with a more complete skill set, consisting both knowledge and experience combined . And so on, they will begin their job better.

Finally, doing internship in the university also help students have some soft skills, which are helpful in working environment such as team workingteamwork , colleague communication, negotiation, risk management... these skills can be get only when they work in the real life, and cannot be trained in any book. Therefore, the student doing internship when studying will be better prepared for the future careers than the student who do not.

To sum up, I total agree that the university should include an internship or some type of work experience in training program. By this way, the student can apply what they have just learned, add working experience to more complete the major knowledge, and have chance to get some useful soft skills for the future working environment. Therefore, they will prepare better for the their careers.
Ulaai 3 / 42  
Jul 13, 2014   #3
colleague communication

interpersonal communication.

negotiation, risk management...these

negotiation, and risk management. These...

To sum up, I total agree

To sum it up, I am totally agree

an internship or some type of work experience in training program

internship or training programs

By this way, the student can apply

the students can apply

Therefore, they will prepare better for the their careers.

Therefore, they can prepare for their careers better.

Hope this helps and good luck!
dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 13, 2014   #4
An professional job mostly begins with an university education.

"An" is used only when the next word begins with a vowel. For example - An egg, An experiment, An organization, An apple, An undertaking

Therefore this sentence needs correction.
A professional job
This is my suggestion for this sentence;
Almost every professional job requires university graduates with expertise and skills of its respective field.
Firstly, students will havestand bettermore chances to apply what they have just learned to the real life when doing internship in education program.
dumi 1 / 6795  
Jul 15, 2014   #5
AnA professional job mostly begins with an university education. The university teaches us the most important knowledge for thehelps us gain necessary knowledge and skills for our future jobcareers. However, beside the knowledge taught from the book, I think the university should add an internship or some working activity in their training because of some reasons.in addition to the structure knowledge it offers, I believe they should equip students with more practical knowledge as well.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1170  
Jul 15, 2014   #6
Also doing internship programmes in the university also helpS students have some soft skills, such as team working, colleague communication, negotiation, and risk management.which are helpful in working environmentsuch as team working, colleague communication, negotiation, risk management ... these essential skills can be getlearnt only when they work in the real life, and cannot be trainedwhich is not in any book.


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