An introduction: negatives of city life

1. negatives of city life: Civic life brings a lot of benefits for residents but it seems not completely pleasant for all of the inhabitants living there. For some people, it's a harsh condition to live in and they might be fed up with this life due to some horrible factors. In my perspective, urbanity also has its own perk. There are some shreds of evidence that advocate my view.

One at a time.

In the first sentence, you need to use a comma to separate the clauses (residents, but) otherwise the sentence structure is all off. You should try to use clearer references in the essay as well. Do not use extra words that are not really needed in the presentation (for all of the inhabitants...). You should also remember that when writing formally, you need to spell out the words. Avoid the use of contractions. Those are only used in informal writing. It is never used in professional or academic writing. I am not sure why you used the term civic life in this essay. I believe you wanted to refer to city life instead. Try to build your English grammar. Make sure to use the correct descriptive word in your presentations because the wrong word usage will result in penalties for you in an English writing test.