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Task 2 IELTS - INVENTORS and DOCTORS' significant role for human being



anita11 28 / 20  
Feb 2, 2016   #1
Q: Inventors are not important to society as doctor.
To what extent do you agree about this statement?

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Nowadays, the advance of technology occurs due to numerous inventions, which are founded by scientists worldwide. In this case, however, discoveries are considered as uncrucial factor to society unlike doctors. I strongly disagree about this statement, because doctors and inventors are of important role for societies' live. In this essay, I will describe the reason why people agree and disagree about this case.

Many people believe that the inventors are not essential for human's life, because most of their inventions do not influence the societies directly and sometimes their discoveries are made to commercial industry interest. For example, the discovery about the household furniture which is similar with the inventions in the past do not make the communities helped, but by seeing that product, they want to purchase it without considering about the real function about the item. Finally, many people are not satisfied about some inventions and they became lazier and lazier because of that invention. Consequently, the people consider that the discoveries are not much important to people's lives.

On the other hand, the inventors and doctors have a similar function, because they give a better life for communities. For instance, the inventors which find the medical equipment can support the doctor's job to cure people. The doctors feel that their job's easier than before with the inventions of surgical tools. Therefore, it proves that the position of doctors and inventors are equal to societies' life.

To sum up, it is evident that the inventors and the doctors have significant roles to human beings. In this case, people have to realize about the functions of both jobs, and the inventors should find the novel discoveries which are useful for human's life, instead of the companies will.

justivy03 - / 2265  
Feb 2, 2016   #2
- discoveries are considered as uncruciala factor to society unlike doctors.
- I strongly disagree aboutto this statement,
- because doctors and inventors are ofboth important role for societies' liveto the society .
- In this essay, I will describeexplain the reason why
- people agree and disagree about this caseon this matter .

- Many people believe that the inventors are not essential forto human's life,
- the societiessociety directly and sometimes their
- past do not make the communities helped, does not help the community ,
- considering about the real function about the item.
- they became lazier and lazierdevelop certain disfunction because of that invention.
- Consequently, the people consider that the discoveries are not much importantof importance to people's lives.

Hi Anita, above are my corrections and remarks for your essay.
As you can see. there's quiet a lot of work to be done, I suggest that you practice writing more, read a lot, review the

English Language rules and be careful in putting words together, research the meaning of the words, play with the and make sure
that the word you choose is the right word, not only for your sentence but also for the idea that you would like your readers to read through.

I hope you follow through with the corrections and learn from it so you can create much more meaningful essays next time.


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