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keep equal number of man and woman to show the respect for both genders


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Jul 20, 2014   #1
These days, many companies employ women workers as many as man workers. More opportunities are rendered to women and female's position is being raised. I do believe it is a good trend for gender equality but it ignores differences between male and female. To some extent, it is not a delicious idea.

In today's world, females are paid more attention. They can equip themselves with knowledge and ability,consequently, more works are offered to them, thus their position is raising. Most of the CEOs of Multinational Companies are women. Women have already proved they are in par excellence than men in many fields.Therefore, it seems to be a good way to promote gender equality.

However, the brightsides are gloss. It is ignored other factors which can affect the choices of labors' gender. psychology and biology have pointed out many differences between men and women by researches.Males are more rational,hence male-dominated professions usually are police or firefighters. By contrast, women are more perceptual.They are fit for nurses or teachers with excellent social skills. So if these companies chase equality fender numbers, if would lead to a curse in some occupations.

In my opinion, the key to the problem is to pursue career path that really interest them. As Einstein said, interest is the best teacher. If people are not interested in a job, no matter what gender they are, they can not do it well.

To sum up, everyone has their own abilities. What we need to do is to find a job which is suitable for ourselves. Only in this way can we have a better life.

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Jul 20, 2014   #2
Where is your prompt? I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL. It is good to see your full prompt in your thread because then we know exactly what it means.

More opportunities are rendered to women and female'stheir position is being raised in society compared to the past.
They can equip themselves with knowledge and ability,consequently, more works are offered to them, thus their position is raising.rising.

"rise" and "raise" mean close, but slightly different. Here's an explanation;
Rise refers to something being moved upwards or an amount of something being increased. For example, to say that the sun rises and hot air rises refers to the action of these objects moving upwards.

Raise refers to something being moved to a higher position or something getting improved. For example, to say that you raise your hand or your voice refers to the action of moving your hand or voice to a higher level than previously. Or, you might refer to a need to raise efficiency in the factory, when factory efficiency needs to improve.


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